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Written Story Kanto Teen The Hippocratic Oath (Chapter 14 11/6/21; please see TW before reading)

What rulesets should I use for my accompanying SSWL run?

  • Naturelocke/Doc-locke combination

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Naturelocke only (Maybe with monotype rules)

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Doc-locke only (maybe with lorelocke rules)

    Votes: 1 12.5%
  • Naturelocke/Doc-locke/Lorelocke monstrosity

    Votes: 5 62.5%

  • Total voters
    8
Thread Description
The dramatic retelling of my Let's Go Pikachu playthrough with Doc-locke and Super Naturelocke rulesets.

Bowser's Family Vacation

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"Am I Mario's babysitter? Are you going to call me every time that guy blows his nose, or what?"
Hell, Metapod probably didn’t even have emotions. They certainly can’t fight. Even Butterfree aren’t that strong. So what difference could it possibly make?
Denial, thy disguise is cruelty.

“Oh come on, look at how adorable they are, and you want me to kill them?!”

The Joy let out a long, tired sigh. “Yep, you’re new alright. Now I’m going to tell you exactly how things work in this field so you don’t waste my time again.”
Knowing your background, Specs, I get the feeling you've been both Comet and Joy at different points?
Aw, Comet's softness for Magikarp is so cute..! 🥺

Alas, Comet, the beautiful woman probably doesn't think you're cute. >_>
 

Uberle

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Stays in the distortion dimension where no one bothers him
That was a fun binge
Also was interested because I'm also doing a run with a medical protag though as usual you have an insane level of detail and commitment in every aspect of this run while my approach is...
Well you'll have to read to figure out

So this is a great concept and is being done very well
I like Comet slowly learning medical stuff and the sometimes very yikes things that come with working in that field

I like Comet as a character
I do sympathize with him, I don't think we can blame him for not knowing what Mewtwo was gonna do
Also a bit messed up to blame the guy who got his Pokemon thrown into the center instead of the one who threw them, but I can get him ending up the scapegoat
However, there are bits where he starts to lose me a bit but I think that's the point
By now I've gotten that his arc will revolve around him learning that sometimes he can't do what is morally right and instead take the logical correct path instead if that makes sense
He's got a strong sense of justice but also has absolutely zero impulse control and seems to have an obsession with being a hero which can result in not great things
Also makes him challenge gyms with sick and injured Pokemon seriously dude I understand the circumstances but you're still a bit too eager to charge in which is definitely gonna bite him

Speaking of which
Comet's "team" with one of the odder naming conventions I've seen
Each one's got a great distinct personality and I like how their sicknesses factor into things
Your attention to detail in both gameplay and story it top notch

I'm guessing Mewtwo is gonna be the main antag, given him trying to override Comet's mind so very interested to see their further development

And that's all for now
Will await the next chapter
 

Moon

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Because they're the two rarest types, they're the rarest pokemon. Yes, that's logical. No, there aren't other Ghost/Ice types. Froslass doesn't exist.

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Before I start, I have to accounce that The Hippocratic Oath has fanart from the continuation of the Hidden Gems Showcase!! A huge thank you to @ACottontail for drawing Bravewhisker, Spikepelt, and Kestrelsight! B even has his little begging bucket and bell from Chapter 2 and Kessie has her goggles; I'm obsessed with it.

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And another thank you to @Uberle for his promo as well! It's good to have you along for the ride :)


In OTHER other news, with the upcoming D&P remakes on the horizon, I wanted to officially announce that I will be doing a SSWL posted run of Brilliant Diamond as sort of an accompanyment to The Hippocratic Oath. Since I've always done a screenshot run of my rulesets, I think this would be a good way to focus more on the gameplay of the naturelocke and doclocke rulesets. But I wanted to get your opinion in the form of a poll on what exactly to do. Would it be best to focus on one ruleset at a time (with caveats of course because I'm a psychopath who apparently can't play Pokemon unless the gameplay is warped beyond recognition)? Would it be best to do a combined naturelocke/doclocke rule just like this? Or should I do something even more insane? Let me know when I get the poll up :)



@Trollkitten - I'm pretty sure that's Comet and Spikepelt's life motto!

@RubyClaw - Comet can certainly see the best in Magikarp, that's for sure! His enthusiasm knows no bounds. And hopefully BW can help him see sense!!

@RisingMew - Hey that's cool that you do that with gift Pokemon in your doc-lite run! I have a little mini rule that I make it less likely for your starter to have a severe illness- didn't help BW though lol. I'm glad you picked up on Comet being extra Comet-y this chapter; it was a lot of fun writing his goofball ways :)

@ACottontail - It's the story everyone knows- a boy and his fish. Yeah Greasy really got what was coming to him. Hopefully he'll think twice about abusing Pokemon in the future. And it sounds like we have another person on Bravewhisker's side of the 'it's a trap' theory!

@Bowser's Family Vacation - Who's in denial?! Certainly not Comet, the pinnacle of mental stability?! Also, you're right about me being Comet and Gale. I once euthanized a cat while I was working at the vet clinic (the owners didn't want to be there for it and it was a good opportunity for me to practice hitting a vein) and I was definitely both Comet and Gale in that moment. Comet is the best and the worst and Bravewhisker is the one who pays for it.

@Uberle - Woohoo, thanks for the binge! :) We're glad to have you on board! Upon reading yours, your protag and my protag are definitely approaching things in very different ways but I love them both. Definitely intentional for you to have mixed feelings about our boy Comet. The naming convention is actually inspired by the Warrior cats book series :) When the cats are apprentices they start out with their own individual prefix with the suffix -paw, like Bravepaw. And then when they officially become a Warrior they gain a unique suffix, like -whisker.

@Moon - Hindsight is 20/20. Foresight is 0/10 would not recommend.

Chapter 10
“So! What’s your name?” said Comet, who had insisted on walking arm in arm with their newest escort, despite Bravewhisker’s warning that he should have at least one arm free to help him balance on the rocky terrain.

“Everyone calls me Cat,” she replied in that same strong, clear voice. Every word she said was carefully enunciated, Comet noticed, as if she was deliberately putting in extra effort to make sure she was understood.

“Well, Cat, thank you very much for joining us,” said Comet with a broad smile. “I’m Comet. This here is Kestrelsight-Kessie.” he held out his other arm with the little Pidgey nestled in the crook of his elbow.

Cat smiled and raised an eyebrow. “I like her goggles,” she said, and extended a hand to pet her. Somehow, Kestrelsight managed to make herself even smaller, flattening herself against Comet’s arm to avoid Cat’s outstretched hand.

“Don’t mind her,” said Comet, “She’s been through a lot. It’s been pretty hard to get her to open up, even to me.”

“I can see that,” said Cat, eyeing her bandaged wing.

“I’m actually a clinician,” Comet said quickly, fearing she would think he was an abuser like that rotten Magikarp salesman. Then, a thought came to Comet. Cat seemed to have a soft spot for Pokemon- maybe she would even think Comet’s new job was noble. Impressive, even. “It’s so sad, seeing so many sick and hurt Pokemon every day. But someone has to step up and take care of them.” Comet turned around and winked at Bravewhisker, wagging his eyebrows up and down. The disgust in the Pikachu’s gaze was palpable.

“Interesting,” said Cat. Comet couldn’t quite tell by her tone of voice if she had been suitably dazzled or not.

“Bravewhisker is back there behind us,” he continued. “He’s a grumpy old geezer, but he’s not as bad as he looks. We call him BW for short.”

Bravewhisker’s ear twitched. “You do realize BW isn’t really ‘short’? It’s more syllables than just saying Bravewisker.”

Comet’s brow furrowed, and he tried to discreetly count with his fingers on the hand that was under Kessie.

“And who’s this little fellow? It doesn’t look like there’s anything wrong with him.” Cat gestured at the Nidoran scampering ahead of them.

“That’s Spikepelt. Also known as Spikers, also known as Little Shit. He suffers from asshole-itis, and also a scratched cornea. He’s almost recovered...from the latter.”

Cat smiled. “Well, he’s still young. I’m sure when he gets older he’ll be quite a formidable fighter.” She withdrew her arm from Comet’s. Fishing in a pouch she had tied to the sash around her waist, she withdrew a glittering, silver stone about the size of her palm. “I found this when I was trying to get through the tunnel, but I don’t have any need for it. Think of it as payment for helping me to Cerulean.”

“Wow...thanks, Cat,” said Comet, turning the stone over in his hands. “Hey, Spikepelt! Come here and look what our new friend got for you!”

Ahead of them, Spikepelt didn’t turn around. He stood in a crouch, quivering with a tinny growl at something out of the scope of Bravewhisker’s light.

“Alright, kid,” said a man’s voice from deeper in the tunnel, “Let’s make this easy for both of us. Recall your Pokemon, put the Poke Balls on the ground, and get out of here.”

The owner of the voice reached Bravewhisker’s light. He wore a black shirt with a large red ‘R’ on the front. Cat stiffened and took a few steps back and out of the light. “Don’t worry,” Comet whispered to her, “I’ll protect you.”

As soon as her eyes laid on the Rocket, Kestrelsight started to panic. She flapped wildly in Comet’s arms, tweeting shrilly as she tried to break free from his arms. He couldn’t tell if she wanted to run away or charge at the Rocket, and he wasn’t sure if Kessie knew either. “Shhh, Kessie, it’s okay,” he whispered. But she continued to flail and scream until he finally put her back in her ball.

Putting her ball back on his belt, Comet glared up at the Rocket. “Alright, asshole. Go ahead and try it.”

Another Rocket stepped forward into the light, glancing at Comet’s Pokemon questioningly. “The boss isn’t gonna want these rejects. Just kill them and take the kid’s money.”

Red light flooded the tunnel, overpowering Bravewhisker’s gentle yellow light, as the Rockets released their Pokemon. Ratatta, Voltorb, Koffing, Magnemite…

“I guess we’re not playing by the rules...Fine by me! Spikepelt, hit the Ratatta with a Double Kick, and Bravewhisker, Thundershock on the Koffing!”

Comet really shouldn’t have been surprised. But his jaw still dropped in shock as Spikepelt rammed straight into the Koffing and Bravewhisker’s well-aimed Thundershock struck at the wall where the Koffing was positioned before. “Spikepelt, there’s no time for this! They’re trying to kill you!”

Still ignoring Comet, Spikepelt sent a barrage of Poison Stings at the Magnemite. The barbs bounced off the Magnemite harmlessly. The Steel Pokemon blinked once, and then charged at Spikepelt. The rest of the enemies followed suit, and soon Comet couldn’t even see Spikepelt through the scuffle. But he could hear his cries as the Rockets’ Pokemon continued their assault.

“Fuck!” Comet fumbled frantically for Spikepelt’s Poke Ball. “Get him out of there, B! Hurry!”

“I can’t use Thundershock,” said Bravewhisker, his voice strained, “I don’t want to hit Spikepelt by mistake.”

Comet tried to recall Spikepelt, but the red beam hit the enemy Pokemon surrounding him and bounced off. “Damn it! I can’t reach him. Bravewhisker, Quick Attack on the Voltorb!”

The Pikachu obeyed, knocking the Voltorb to the side. But then the Magnemite turned around and launched a Sonicboom, sending Bravewhisker tumbling back while the Rattata and Koffing continued their attack.

Comet’s heart pounded, his breathing heavy and rushed. A quiet voice came from within his own mind.

I can help you, Comet's Fury. You only have to surrender...

Suddenly, a blinding white light lit up the tunnel.

The enemy Pokemon all flinched, turning their eyes away. Bravewhisker let go of his own light, shielding his eyes with one paw. Then the white light faded, engulfing the tunnel in darkness once again. There was a pained robotic buzzing noise, and then something hard hit the rock wall. The Rattata cried out, and the Koffing grunted, and then everything was silent.

The gentle yellow light from Bravewhisker returned, illuminating the tunnel. The enemy Pokemon lay unconscious on the ground. Standing in their place, panting, was Spikepelt- now a Nidorino.

Comet let go of his necklace. He had been gripping it so hard the edges of Waterfall’s scale had dug into his palm almost deep enough to draw blood. A smile slowly spread over his face, and he rushed to lift the newly evolved Pokemon into the air.

“Spikepelt, look at you!!! You’re such a badass now! WOO!” Comet crowed, spinning in a tight circle.

Spikepelt rolled his eyes. “Obviously I had it under control.”

“Oh dear Arceus,” said Comet, pressing the side of Spikepelt’s head against his chest. “You can speak in complete sentences now. The sass will know no bounds.”

The Nidorino turned his head so no one could see him smile.

“Sorry to break up the cuddle fest, but we’re not done yet.”

More Team Rocket grunts had appeared behind the original two and released more Pokemon- Zubats, Raticate, Ekans…

Fear making his heart race again, Comet slowly lowered Spikepelt to the ground. “It’s okay, guys,” he said, trying to keep his voice level, “We’ll make it out of this even if I have to fight along with you!”

But before any of the Pokemon could move, a loud, clear voice rang out behind Comet. “ENOUGH!”

Comet’s jaw dropped. Stepping into the light with her dress billowing at her feet, Cat tossed a Luxury Ball. A lithe, growling Persian emerged, tail lashing with anticipation. The Rockets stared at her with strange expressions on their faces. One of them started to ask, “Why are you-”

“Get ‘em, Lace! And make it quick!”

The feline leapt forward and the enemy Pokemon braced themselves...But the Persian sailed right over them and slashed her claws at their trainers.

Spitting curses and screams, the Rockets and their Pokemon fled back down the tunnel to escape the yowling Lace.

With a satisfied smirk, Cat returned her Pokemon as soon as the screams had died down enough for her liking. “Sorry I held back so long. I knew you had it under control with just the two of them, but I didn’t realize they would have reinforcements… Those squirming pathetic rats.”

Comet thought he might have to pick his jaw up off the ground. “But...but I thought you-”

“I know,” she said, shaking her golden curls out of her hair tie. Comet watched with slack-jawed fascination. “I’m sorry for that too. I’m not really a lost, helpless little damsel. I’ve been trying to spy on Team Rocket, and I knew they would never suspect me if I seemed weak.” She piled her hair up in a bun and tied it up again. It was so long that a few twirling strands hung out to frame her face. “Ready to keep going? They shouldn’t bother us again. If they’re smart.”

Bravewhisker squinted suspiciously at Cat, little arms crossed across his chest. Comet ignored him and started to walk again alongside her. “So you nickname your Pokemon too, huh? That’s cool.”

Fur bristling and through gritted teeth, Bravewhisker said, “That’s really the only question you have for her after all that?”

“Yes,” said Cat with a smile, “Although I can’t say I have nicknames for my nicknames like you do.”

Comet blushed. “Huh, I never really thought of it that way.”

They turned a bend in the tunnel, and Cat looked at Comet intently. “You know...there’s something else I didn’t mention earlier. I recognize you. You’re from Professor Oak’s crew. The one who freed Mewtwo.”

Comet swallowed and looked down at his feet. “Yeah, that’s me. Unfortunately.”

“Don’t be ashamed,” she said, her blue eyes blazing fiercely, “I think you did the right thing.”

Comet nearly tripped in his shock. “You do?”

“Yes. That Pokemon was suffering, and you were the only one with the balls to do something about it. Those scientists deserved what they got. Sure, what happened in Viridian was sad, but how were you supposed to know Mewtwo would react that way? Why were you punished for an accident while you were just trying to save a Pokemon? I just don’t see how it was your fault.”

Flinging his hands upward, Comet shouted, “Thank you! Dear Arceus, you have NO idea how much I needed to hear that. EVERYONE says what happened was my fault. Everyone. And it sucks so much because I don’t get it! And they just don’t listen to me when I try to explain it to them. Cat, you’re seriously the only one who understands.”

Comet vaguely realized his hands were trembling in excitement. The words had all left him in a rush. It was just such a relief to feel so...validated. Someone finally understood.

“Don’t listen to them,” said Cat firmly, her strong voice ringing through the tunnel. “People who think that way are weak, Comet. They just can’t accept that sometimes people have to get hurt in order to do what’s right. Sometimes bad things happen to people. And if they can’t handle that, they shouldn’t expect the strong people like us to baby them over it.”

New light started to mingle with Bravewhisker’s yellow glow. They were almost at Cerulean City.

“Plus,” she continued, “It’s like they just forgot all the good things you’ve done before. I’ve heard lots of stories from you and the Kanto Bough. I think my favorite has to be Kalos, against Lysandre.” Cat gave him a smile that made Comet’s heart threaten to fly right out his mouth. “Now that was heroic.”

Lysandre. Comet’s greatest achievement. He could have beamed just thinking about it. Waterfall taking on his Mega Gyarados. Goldenflame taking on his Pyroar. If Comet and his team hadn’t been there to stop Team Flare, who knows what could have happened? Those were the days. He didn’t think anyone remembered anything he did before the accident in Viridian. Not even his friends. Not even Oak.

“Cat, listen to me,” said Comet solemnly as they approached the exit, “Let’s stick together, okay? I know it sounds crazy because we just met, but you really understand me like no one else does right now. I could use a friend who’s on my side. I really like you, Cat…”

But the young woman was staring ahead at the approaching tunnel exit, brow furrowed. “Do you hear that?”

Comet listened. There was a commotion of some kind going on outside the tunnel. It sounded like a crowd of people all talking at once, loudly and frantically. The occasional crash and scream rang out, and the sounds of fighting echoed toward them through the tunnel. They emerged from Mt. Moon and descended on Cerulean City…

...Which had been completely overrun by Team Rocket.
 

Trollkitten

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But the young woman was staring ahead at the approaching tunnel exit, brow furrowed. “Do you hear that?”

Comet listened. There was a commotion of some kind going on outside the tunnel. It sounded like a crowd of people all talking at once, loudly and frantically. The occasional crash and scream rang out, and the sounds of fighting echoed toward them through the tunnel. They emerged from Mt. Moon and descended on Cerulean City…

...Which had been completely overrun by Team Rocket.
PLOT TWIIIIIIIIIIST!

I'm looking forward to seeing how this goes.
 

RisingMew

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Now this is an interesting chapter indeed! I was prepared for things to go massively awry in the tunnel and, while they still kinda did, it certainly wasn't in the way I expected. Cat seems like an interesting character, but I can't help but be a bit suspicious of her. I have my own private theories as to what her story might be, but I think I'll keep them to myself while things develop :0

I was wondering how Team Rocket was going to make its glorious appearance in this story, and it seems like they'll prove to be a very intriguing foe. Given how much interaction they have with the plot of these games, and how brutal you've set them out to be, the road ahead could be very dangerous for Comet and co.

I was quite surprised by the casual mention of Comet assisting in the entire defeat of Team Flare! It seems his history is a lot more grand and storied than I had previously assumed--it definitely makes his change in condition all the more of a crushing blow!
 

Moon

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Because they're the two rarest types, they're the rarest pokemon. Yes, that's logical. No, there aren't other Ghost/Ice types. Froslass doesn't exist.
oh no.
that's not good.
 

RubyClaw

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First of all, @ACottontail that's adorable! I love them all. Great job.

Well that's too good to be true, I doubt Comet could have asked for anything better than Cat at his point, which makes me highly suspicious. Sort of a "be careful what you wish for" scenario. But perhaps that's just the cynic in me, and her "ends justifies the means" approach is an interesting mirror for Comet that might make him actually think twice about his approach much more than the criticism he got from everyone else (or knowing Comet, perhaps not :P).

Well, it seems a test is ahead of them, let's find out what happens next!
 

QuietGuardian

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My internal alarms starting blaring when Cat first showed up last chapter. They quieted down a bit when she acted against Rocket rather than with them, but they're back in full force after her little speech about some people being weak and flattering Comet. I get the sense that she recognizes him as someone who's easy to manipulate and she knows exactly how to do it.

…Although matters concerning her might have to come later if Team Rocket is attacking Cerulean City. I'm sure Comet will want to be a hero, but let's hope he doesn't act rashly again…okay, he probably will, but let's hope it doesn't have rough consequences.
 

ACottontail

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That battle was a close call. You really upped the tension to the point it felt like it could've been a team wipe, or at least Bravewhisker and Spikepelt would die leaving Comet not much in terms of teammates. I was really worried when Mewtwo tried to make an offer with Comet, and then all of that blinding light. I guess I should have had more faith in Spikepelt though, he's not going down that easily. That was a really good use of the evolution during an important battle trope, I thought the battle was one where one of Comet's pokemon could have died with how badly his team was doing or a scene to demonstrate what Mewtwo would do if he got control.
I like Kat so far. She seems to be nice, but the way the story presents her I'm on the line on whether she is trustworthy or not. When she first appeared suspicion was raised and Bravewhisker is still suspicious, but she is acting or nice to Comet. She gave him a Moonstone when she saw that he had a Nidoran. I hope she's not hiding something, thought it does bring to question why any suspicion was raised on her if she is good all along. At least she doesn't seem to be working for team rocket. I like how she sends out Lace against the team rocket grunts and not their pokemon. It's almost as if she knows they force pokemon to work for them, though she didn't say anything more about their pokemon. How does team rocket get any pokemon to listen to them? The grunts did say they were going to kill Comet's pokemon for being "rejects", so it's not like they don't deserve to have Lace sicced at them.
I like how Kat brings up the more positive aspects of Comet's past. Throughout this entire story people have been focusing on Comet's big mistake that all of his past heroic actions were seemingly sweeped away. Stopping Lysander is huge. It reminds me about how a scandal can completely ruin someone's career to the point that it's the only thing people ever talk about when talking about that person anymore, and how all their past actions and what they've made are forgotten to the scandal.
I also like how Kat comments on how Comet has nicknames for his nicknames XD When Comet realizes that BW is longer than Bravewhisker.

As for the poll I would really like to see you go over the game play for the doc locke. The rules for the doclocke are a bit vague. With only 1 example in the thread it's a bit hard to get a framework of what to make the pokemon you catch limitations and all the equipment you can buy to help the clinic. So I feel like a documented doclocke run would help people get a better idea of how to make the limitations and prognosis. I of course voted for the hybrid run monstrosity because I love seeing chaos.
 

Bowser's Family Vacation

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"Am I Mario's babysitter? Are you going to call me every time that guy blows his nose, or what?"
“Spikepelt, there’s no time for this! They’re trying to kill you!”
I feel like this is the naturelocke curse. 😔

I can't decide whether to like you for validating Comet or to be suspicious of you because of your obvious contempt for those you view as "weak," Cat. 😐

Speaking of cursed, if there's anyone who could do a Naturelocke/Doc-locke/Lorelocke monstrosity, it's you! It's your run, obviously, and if it's too much, I'd love to see you showcase how your Naturelocke and Doc-locke rules combine, but you did survive a Throneslocke. :P
 

Spectacles

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*looks at poll results*
*sweats*

@Trollkitten - Verrry Twisty indeed!

@RisingMew - I was very excited to introduce Cat to you all; she's a character who's been bouncing around in my head for QUITE some time. And yeah Team Rocket has really taken it up a notch here. Comet definitely had quite far to fall- he and the Kanto Bough team were legit heroes!

@Moon - Far from it!!

@RubyClaw - Very sound assessment of Cat! You can never tell how and if Comet will learn from something like this lol.

@QuietGuardian - It sounds like you and Bravewhisker were very much on the same page when it comes to Cat lol. And you've got that right- Comet is definitely easy to manipulate, poor soul.

@ACottontail - I'm glad I succeeded in my attempt to throw some battle tension out there :) The evolution or death fake out is an oldie but a goodie in my opinion. Cat is a ton of fun and I'm so glad you're enjoying her so far! She's kind of a cut-to-the-chase kind of person, hence the 'attack your lifepoints directly!' approach when dealing with Rockets. Also, I couldn't wait to add that line in about BW and Bravewhisker as soon as I realized the syllable count. Oh my gosh you really had me about the poll up until that last sentence!!! I thought you were going to be the sole voice of reason lol!!!

@Bowser's Family Vacation - Spikepelt is the Naturelocke Curse incarnate. Pretty much summed up Cat in a nutshell there! And did I really survive the Throneslocke? Sometimes I think that run was the end of me and this has all been a purgatory fever dream since then.

Before I get into the next chapter, I just wanted to announce that starting in October, The Hippocratic Oath's updates will come once per month instead of once every two weeks. My writing hasn't really slowed or anything (I have a 10 chapter buffer that I've maintained by writing one chapter per two week period), but I've been neglecting my other hobbies to maintain that pace and I just know when all these new Pokemon games come out I'm gonna be in a bind for time. I think if I move to one update per month I'll have a lot more time to catch up y'all's runs, play the DP remakes, and read Wheel of Time ahead of the upcoming tv show (the hype is real).

So, the next two chapters will happen as regularly scheduled, on 9/18 and 10/2, and then after that they will come on the first Saturday of each month. Thank you all for understanding!

Chapter 11
Cerulean was chaos.

The streets were full of people running, their faces blanched in fear. Rockets chased them with their Pokemon hard at their heels, Zubats swooping over the ducking crowd’s heads. One young man fell, and then the Rockets were upon him. They tackled him to the ground, two holding his flailing fists while the other rifled through his pockets for money and for his Poke Balls. It was happening all through the crowd- people shoved to the ground and lost in the confusion to all but the Rockets as they swept in and took their loot.

“ What is this? They’re trying to take over whole cities now?!” Comet exclaimed.

Cat’s eyes narrowed. “I guess we better get out there and join the fight.”

Comet had been thinking the same thing, though he spared a worried glance at his Pokemon. Bravewhisker’s breathing was starting to become labored from the fight in the cave. Spikepelt, even though he was freshly evolved and trying his best to appear ready for a fight, was also still pretty battered from his close call. The unevolved Phoenixfall and catatonic Kestrelsight couldn’t offer much in this kind of battle. Even Comet’s own fatigue was starting to catch up to him after a night of being poisoned and tormented by dreams and then waking to a dead Metapod and then attacking a salesman and running from the law...Day two of being a clinician and Comet already sorely needed a vacation.

Cat didn’t share Comet’s hesitation. “We should split up. We’ll be able to cover more ground that way.”

Before Comet could stop her, she had released Lace and was rushing off into the fray. He stared after her worriedly. They really should have agreed on a meeting place before splitting up. But there was no time to worry about that now.

“Alright. Spikers, BW. Let’s get ready for a-”

“Stop right there, Comet’s Fury.”

An involuntary cringe seized Comet’s body in reaction to that voice. “Steel. What are you doing here?”

He could practically hear the sneer in Steel’s voice even though he hadn’t turned to face him. “The Kanto Bough is defending the city against Team Rocket. This doesn’t concern you.”

Comet turned around and gave him a sarcastic smile, starting to walk past him. “What a coincidence! Turns out, I’m fighting the Rockets too.” Steel put a hand up against Comet’s shoulder, stopping his stride. Comet’s smile turned into a grimace. “Are we really doing this right now?”

In answer, Steel activated one of the Poke Balls at his belt. An Oddish emerged, rustling its leaves in eagerness for a fight.

“Don’t you think there’s more important things to be worrying about right now with all this chaos?”

Steel fixed him with an icy glare. “As far as I’m concerned, you’re the bigger threat here.I haven’t forgotten what happened the last time you tried to fight with the Kanto Bough.”

“Fine,” Comet snarled, and sent out Spikepelt. His legs trembled as he emerged, but he straightened up quickly with a scowl.

“You’re sending me out against a weed?” said Spikepelt, nose wrinkled in disgust.

“Focus, Spike. You have to watch out- you’re still pretty beat up from the battle in the tunnel.”

“I’m fine!” snapped the Nidorino, and he launched himself at the enemy Oddish. His horn struck home, making the little plant cry out in pain. It rustled its leaves, and a yellow powder sprayed out to cover Spikepelt’s body.

“Watch your eye,” said Comet with a groan. Spikepelt turned his head away, squeezing his eyes shut tight. He thrust out his horn again, landing a hit that took the Oddish down.

“No more games. Let’s get this over with quickly, just like last time,” said Steel, sending out his Eevee.

Comet hesitated. That Eevee had cost him the win in his last battle with Steel, and that was when his Pokemon were all in good shape. Reaching into his bag, his fingers brushed lightly over the smooth Moon Stone. It could be their only chance at a victory here, but could a Pokemon really evolve twice in one day? And if he barely listened to Comet as a Nidorino...

Defiant rage blazed in Spikepelt’s dark eyes. Comet dropped the Moon Stone and withdrew his hand from the bag as sweat started to trickle down his temple. “Not a good match with you paralyzed,” said Comet, “Let’s switch in for BW.”

“I can take an Eevee, paralyzed or not!” Spikepelt shouted, digging his heels in stubbornly.

Steel barked out a humorless laugh. “Nice to know even your Pokemon realize what an ass you are. Quick Attack, Eevee!”

Spikepelt tried to dodge, but static coursed through his legs and rooted him to the spot. The Eevee scored a direct hit, sending him tumbling back.

“Alright, now I’m not giving you the choice,” said Comet, sending the Nidorino back into his Poke Ball. Bravewhisker stepped forward in his place, sparks flying from his cheeks. “Okay, B, give them a taste of their own medicine!”

“Quick Attack again!”

The Eevee collided with Bravewhisker just as he sent forth a flurry of static energy from his fur. The Eevee cried out as it made contact, muscles tensing under paralysis.

“Hey Steel? Can I give you some advice?” asked Comet.

“No.”

“Spamming Quick Attack is for limp dicks.”

Steel scowled. “And paralysis is better?”

“You just used paralysis!”

Rubbing his temples, Steel surveyed their Pokemon. Bravewhisker stood panting with every breath and Eevee struggled to keep upright on trembling muscles. “How about this,” said Steel, “I’m going to need to have a Pokemon in fighting condition after I’m through with you. And your Pikachu looks like it’s ready to keel over any second now. You withdraw your Pikachu and I’ll withdraw my Eevee, and my last Pokemon can take on your last two. Unless you want to give up now and head back through that tunnel.”

Comet swallowed and looked down at his belt. Last two Pokemon. Steel didn’t know about Phoenixfall- he thought Comet still had two battle-ready Pokemon left. And yet he was still this confident he could win two against one? Dear Arceus, thought Comet, I would rather throw myself straight into a Guzzlord’s mouth than send out Phoenixfall right now. He would never live it down. Not that sending out Kestrelsight would be much better...And he certainly couldn’t give up and back down...Comet sighed. He was starting to get far too accustomed to feeling humiliated lately.

“Alright, BW, you heard him. Step back.” Bravewhisker obeyed, and Steel’s Eevee followed suit. Steel put a hand on his last Poke Ball and waited.

Comet tried not to feel ill. He was hoping Steel would have sent out his last Pokemon first so he could have a better idea of whether he should send out Kessie or just bury himself in the dirt. But clearly everyone was waiting on his move, and so he sent out his Pidgey.

Upon emerging from her ball, Kessie instinctively started to turn her head to look around. “Ah ah ah!” cried Comet, “Keep looking straight ahead! Focus on the beanpole with the superiority complex.” To Comet’s delight, the little Pidgey seemed to know who he was talking about and kept her eyes trained on Steel. He hoped the battle would keep her distracted enough. The last thing he needed was for his last fighting Pokemon to throw a panic attack right now when she sees the Rockets wreaking havoc all over the city.

Steel snorted. “I can’t believe you still have that cripple on your team. This is going to be even faster than I thought.”

And he sent out a Pidgeotto.

Comet couldn’t fix his face fast enough to hide a blanche. They were toast.

“Use Gust, Pidgeotto!”

Kessie clenched her feet, digging her claws into the dirt. She leaned into the Pidgeotto’s gales, a strangely determined look in her eyes. Comet nodded in approval. She may not be able to use her wings, but that doesn’t mean she couldn’t fight at all. “Alright, Kessie, let’s give that bird a taste of the old iron skull!”

“Quick Attack!” Steel ordered.

The Pidgeotto dove forward at blinding speed. Kessie dipped into a crouch, swinging her head back with all her might…

Comet had just enough time to think that maybe this was a terrible idea before the impact happened.

CRACK!!!

It was like a baseball scene. Kessie’s head was the bat. Pidgeotto was the ball. And wings had nothing to do with how far and fast the ball flew. The Pidgeotto struck Steel right in the chest, and they both toppled to the ground in a heap of feathers and tangled limbs. Comet stared at them in stunned silence for a moment before his gaze turned to his Pidgey.

“...Kestrelsight? Are you okay?”

She swayed on her feet and didn’t react.

“Kessie?”

The little Pidgey shook herself...and then began to glow white.

Comet’s entire body lurched in relief as Kestrelsight’s silhouette grew and morphed. “Seriously?! Again with the evolving when I think you’re dead?! You guys are going to give me a heart attack if you keep this up…”

He trailed off as the light faded and Kestrelsight the Pidgeotto stared at him, goggled eyes like dinner plates. Bandages popped off her injured wing like a burst pinata. Her goggles, now too small for her newly evolved head, slowly slid up to rest on top of her red feathered crest.

Comet sighed. She was still frickin adorable. “I’m sorry. I didn’t mean that. Your evolution was very special and well-timed. You are perfect and I would change nothing about you and your ridiculously thick skull.”

But Kestrelsight didn’t seem to hear him. Instead, her wide eyes were trained on something just behind where Comet stood.

A voice he didn’t recognize said, “He’s not half bad. Beat one of Oak’s brats.”

Comet turned to the source of the voice- another Rocket grunt, surrounded by several others. “Get back or you’re next!” said Comet, trying to keep the confidence in his voice. It was difficult when Kessie had already started to violently tremble next to him.

The grunt let out a derisive laugh. “Come on, kid. Get real. You’re spent. I just wanted to see if we could cut a deal instead of killing you instantly and taking what you’ve got.”

The noise of battle raged behind Comet. He turned around and saw that Steel had already recovered and was fighting back other Rockets with his Eevee. He was getting further and further away with each attack.

“I’d love to talk,” said Comet slowly, “But I didn’t get to rub my win in Steel’s face nearly as much as I should have, and now he’s getting away. So I better go.”

Poke Balls opened around him, and soon Comet was surrounded by enemies-again. Kessie pressed up against his leg, her feathers sticking out wildly and her trembling doubled. He couldn’t tell if she was ready to run or for a madcap, berserker attack. Either way, her eyes looked feral.

“This is your one and only chance,” said the lead grunt. “We heard good things about you, kid. Why don’t you stop being everyone’s punching bag and join us? Awful lot better than being killed. It’s a no brainer.”

Comet surveyed the enemies around him. A particularly nasty, hungry looking Raticate snarled at him and gnashed its teeth. As the Rockets’ Pokemon closed in, Steel got further away. “No, seriously. I’m super late for a very important ego check delivery. You see, last time he kicked my ass and he made fun of me really bad, but THIS time I beat him with the unevolved form of-”

“So what I’m hearing is, you care more about gloating to your rival than you do your own life.”

“...As of right now, yeah. It’s been a pretty rough day.”

The lead grunt shrugged. “Alright. You had your chance.”

He raised his hand to signal the killing blow.

Foolish, said the voice in Comet’s head. Twice now you’ve been surrounded and deny my help, and now you will die.

For some reason, Comet couldn’t bring himself to close his eyes.

I guess Mewtwo's font got taken out of the forum lineup so we're just going to have italics and bold font for them for now on.

In-game, Kessie actually did beat a Pidgeotto one on one as a Pidgey. She actually evolved in a pretty spectacular fashion after she almost died fighting a Team Rocket grunt's Raticate, but there was really no room in the story for that. I can't remember if I ever went over her Doc-locke rules in detail or not, but she can't use flying moves until her wing heals and being in battle with a Team Rocket member or a Golbat triggers her PTSD and causes her to behave erratically in battle (using random moves, trying to switch out in battle, etc.).

She also may or may not be slightly inspired by Hei Hei the chicken from Moana.

Comet and Steel's dynamic may or may not be slightly inspired by Joey Wheeler and Seto Kiaba, respectively.
 

Bowser's Family Vacation

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"Am I Mario's babysitter? Are you going to call me every time that guy blows his nose, or what?"
Day two of being a clinician and Comet already sorely needed a vacation.
I feel like this line came from your soul, Specs. :P

“Are we really doing this right now?”

In answer, Steel activated one of the Poke Balls at his belt. An Oddish emerged, rustling its leaves in eagerness for a fight.

“Don’t you think there’s more important things to be worrying about right now with all this chaos?”

Steel fixed him with an icy glare. “As far as I’m concerned, you’re the bigger threat here.I haven’t forgotten what happened the last time you tried to fight with the Kanto Bough.”
s u s

Just let the Rockets stomp him if you're so worried about him, Steel. >_>

Headbutts are never a good idea, Comet. ._. When will you learn that your actions have consequences!?
 

ACottontail

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What the heck was up with Steel? The city is literally invaded by Rockets and he chooses to weaken both his own and Comet's pokemon with a battle during it? Could he not have waited a bit? To me it seems that Steel is just as reckless as Comet, except he hasn't angered any legendaries into a rampage yet. Yay Kestrelsight evolved! For a second it looked like she was a goner, but she made it! I'm so happy for her! I feel like Kestrelsight is on a good path to recovery since she evolved and hasn't fallen yet. As trust points build up and her wing heals, I really hope she makes it to the end. Still even narrativley the tension is kept high. It felt seriously intense when Comet had to do harsh battle after harsh battle and I wonder if you had time to heal your pokemon in game or if the Doclocke's time system didn't let you. I have the bad feeling that something terrible is going to happen with that cliffhanger. I'm not sure if it'll be a death, Mewtwo taking over or what.
 

Moon

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Because they're the two rarest types, they're the rarest pokemon. Yes, that's logical. No, there aren't other Ghost/Ice types. Froslass doesn't exist.
Nooooooo!

Steel's getting away!
 

QuietGuardian

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Despite Comet not always being quite my kind of protagonist, I have to admire his resolution to be a cheeky little shit when outnumbered and outclassed by those Rockets. And Steel does deserve an ego check of his own—yes, Comet made a bad call that resulted in a number of deaths, but he is paying for it, and how the hell is defeating his already weakened, sick Pokémon a bigger priority than stopping a huge gang of thieves and murderers?

By the laws of storytelling, I'm going to guess that your protagonist isn't going to die here and someone will arrive just in time to save him. The only question is, who? Moon? Misty? Mewtwo? Possibly even someone whose name doesn't start with an M?
 

RubyClaw

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Man, Oak needs to work on his candidate filtering skills some more because it seems ego is the number one criteria!

Steel sure deserves a reality check, though that's not the best timing. *sigh, I hope everyone makes it alive.
 

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@Bowser's Family Vacation - I may or may not be channeling my general and Covid-related Healthcare exhaustion into poor Comet. And I think Comet's difficulties with actions and consequences stems entirely from situations like this where he takes a risk and then everything turns out okay.

@ACottontail - Steel might still be just a smidge bitter about the whole Mewtwo incident. And yep, good ole Kessie is really turning herself around! As far as the Doc-locke time mechanic, that doesn't really affect when you get to heal, it only determines how many battles you can fight until the end of each day. But when you're racing against the clock with Pokemon in failing health, you are likely to do less grinding so that you can make as much money as possible each day.

@Moon - Absolutely hilarious that you and Comet have the same priorities here.

@QuietGuardian - Comet is definitely the kind of person who can irritate your soul while still being semi-charming in his own way. Steel likes to pretend like he's more reasonable than Comet but he's arguably just as out of touch with reality. Very good guesses with the M calvary! :)

@RubyClaw - TRUE. With Comet and Steel it's a constant clash of egos. Moon and Cadence are holding it together for everyone.

Chapter 12
One second, the Rocket grunt was standing in front of Comet with his hand raised, willing the pack of vicious enemy Pokemon to close in for the kill. The next second, the Rocket grunt was upside down.

Comet’s eyes widened. The grunt was hanging suspended by his ankle from a long, thick vine. The vine...was attached to a massive, hulking Venusaur.

And behind the Venusaur was Moon.

She pointed at Comet. “Cadence, cover them!”

Cadence and their Wartortle busted through the ring of Rocket Pokemon with a heavy blast of water. Jumping to stand behind Comet, Cadence shouted, “Protect!”

The Wartortle put up a shield around them just as Moon cried, “Petal Dance!”

A torrent of razor sharp leaves ripped through the air. They collided with Wartortle’s shield, bursting as they struck in a blaze of glowing green light. It was bright enough for Comet to shield his eyes.

The noise died down, and Cadence’s Wartortle dropped his shield. They were now surrounded by fainted Pokemon and vine-entangled Rocket grunts.

Comet looked around at the fallen enemies and blinked. “Wow. Thanks, guys! I almost forgot what kickass battlers you are.”

“Don’t mention it,” said Cadence, but they and their Wartortle both looked exhausted.

“Everyone okay?” asked Moon, tightening the vines on one of the grunts.

“We’re okay. But…” Comet pursed his lips. “You guys didn’t happen to see a girl mixed up in all this, did you? Long, blonde hair, blue eyes, dark red dress, perfect in every way?”

Moon’s mouth curved in a disapproving frown. “Do you know anyone who looks like that?”

“I haven’t seen anyone who fits that description,” said Cadence, sitting on the ground with a long exhale. Wartortle sat down next to them with a puff of expelled air.

Sparing Cadence and their Pokemon a concerned glance, Moon said, “You guys look like you can use a rest. Venusaur and I can take it from here; why don’t you all go back to the clinic and get healed up, and I’ll meet up with you later?”

“No,” said Comet firmly, “I have to find Cat. She’s out there somewhere and she might need help. Plus, I’m in love with her.”

Everyone stared at Comet in stunned silence. Finally, Cadence let out a long-suffering sigh and buried their face in their hands. Venusaur went so far as to roll his eyes. Moon tried to be more diplomatic. “You said blonde hair and a dark red dress? I can try to keep an eye out for her while I’m cleaning up. Comet, you really look like hell and so do your Pokemon. You won’t do her any good if you get yourself hurt looking for her. You need some rest.”

Comet recalled his trembling, exhausted Pidgeotto and said, “A light coma is what I really need after the day I’ve had, but I’ll take you up on the offer for a rest. Thanks, Moon.”

Moon smiled, and it brought Comet back to the old days. He should be fighting alongside with them today, Waterfall helping Cadence’s Wartortle flood their enemies, loyal Goldenflame always right by Comet’s side to burn whoever would come near. Comet watched longingly as Moon and her Venusaur rushed away, bringing justice to everyone in their path.



Despite Comet’s hopes that two Team Rocket attacks in a row-along with everything else that had happened prior- would be enough excitement for one day, more problems awaited upon his return to the clinic. Namely, as soon as they stepped through the doorway, Phoenixfall the Magikarp burst out of her Poke Ball to flop helplessly on the floor.

“Shit!” said Comet, “I forgot about this part.” He struggled to pick up the flailing fish, bouncing her between his hands as he rushed her back upstairs, Cadence trailing behind.

“Get her to the pool in the Pokemon Center lobby,” said Cadence, “Wartortle, give her some water!”

The Wartortle nodded and spit a gentle Water Gun at Phoenixfall. But the Magikarp’s flapping tail slapped most of the water directly into Comet’s face. Coughing and sputtering through a mouthful of water, Comet practically threw her into the Pokemon Center’s pool.

Wartortle’s ears drooped in embarrassment, and Cadence murmured a sheepish, “Sorry, Comet…”

Comet sighed. He couldn’t be mad at those faces. Besides, he was too weary to even wipe the water off his face. “S’okay. Needed a shower.”

Cadence peered into the pool at Phoenixfall. She was swimming gracefully now, looking up at them with a serene expression. “You’re gonna need a pool for your clinic,” said Cadence. “Maybe the professor can help…”

Comet knew Cadence was staring at him expectantly, so he deliberately avoided eye contact. “Or I can just get her a tank.”

“Or that…” said Cadence, crestfallen. They turned to stare at the wall and then froze. “Uh, Comet?”

“What?”

“Why is your face on a wanted poster?”

Comet suppressed the urge to drown himself in the Pokemon Center pool and walked up to where Cadence was staring. Sure enough, there was a technicolor drawing of his face with ‘WANTED’ written above it and ‘for assault on a merchant outside Mt. Moon. May have passed through to Cerulean City’ underneath.

“Greasy the salesman strikes back,” said Comet numbly.

Cadence gulped. “Looks like you need a disguise. Maybe I can help you dye your hair. Especially since your hair’s already wet...”

“Black.”

“...Really?” Cadence asked incredulously.

“Black like my soul.”

“I was thinking more of a-” Cadence took one look at the expression on Comet’s face and put up their hands in surrender, “Okay, okay fine! Black like your soul and the bags under your eyes. Also, not to add to your stress, but I actually think your Magikarp would be safer in the natural water outside than in here. More space for her to hide away, especially with Team Rocket being as bold as they are in this city.”

Comet looked around the bustling Pokemon Center. Nurse Joy was running back and forth, handing Poke Balls back to worried trainers and loading more up onto the healing table. Trainers frantically mashing keys on the PC boxes to check their bank accounts and their stored Pokemon. The place was chaos; no one would notice if someone were to pluck Phoenixfall out of the water and take off. Cadence was right.

They left the Pokemon Center together, Cadence rushing off to the Mart to buy hair dye and Comet to the riverbed. He gently lowered the Magikarp into the water and said, “Stay safe, Phoe. I’m gonna see if I can order you a tank so we can get you back indoors.”

Phoenixfall blinked demurely. “These waters are much calmer than your chaotic lands. Worry not for me, young one.”

“This is why you’re my favorite,” he said, his words thick with exhaustion. He attempted to pat the Magikarp on the head but only managed to stir the water’s surface.

Back at the clinic, Comet opened the catalogue, glanced at the prices of Magikarp-sized fish tanks, and gently laid himself on the exam room floor with a medical textbook draped over his head.

Tiny footsteps approached him after a few moments, and Bravewhisker lifted a page to peer at Comet’s face. “What’s the matter with you?”

“Why is it so expensive to keep all of you alive?”

The Pikachu sighed. “Yeah, I’m thinking a tank isn’t the way to go. Especially when she evolves. Better to listen to Cadence and try to have a pool installed somehow. The old clinic had one for all the water types who couldn’t dwell on land.”

Getting a pool installed would be just as expensive as getting the isolation unit put in. Every night they spent without a pool meant another night Phoenixfall had to spend outside, so they had to get it done soon. PLUS, Comet still needed to set up an appointment at the Saffron City clinic for Spearow and Abra, and who knows how much that was gonna cost. The only way to make that much money that fast would be another grant, but that would mean fighting another gym…

Comet stared at Bravewhisker carefully. He seemed to be pretty well-rested after the earlier excitement; his breathing had calmed down and he was moving much easier. But Comet remembered how he was that morning, struggling just to inhale and exhale before he upped the dose of his medicine. They should wait until tomorrow, Comet knew. They had been through so much in just one day, and the last thing they needed was another gym battle on top of it.

...But what would one more day mean for Bravewhisker? Would he be able to battle? Would he even be alive?

Comet tried to picture taking on Misty’s team with Spikepelt and Kestrelsight, but the thought made his stomach turn. Kessie would be drowned by projectiles before she could get a hit in with her thick skull. And Spikepelt would be at risk for a super effective psychic attack- and that’s not even taking into consideration his newly-evolved attitude. They would lose, and Phoenixfall would have to spend the night out in the wild.

Comet swallowed. If they were going to challenge the gym at all, they would have to do it tonight, while Bravewhisker was still healthy. He was their only chance.

Every muscle in Comet’s body screamed for him to go straight to bed. Taking on a gym was at the very bottom of his list of things he wanted to do today, right next to ‘eat rocks’ and ‘walk on a Slugma’.

“What we need,” said Comet finally, “Is coffee. Lots of coffee.”

But instead of coffee, Comet received a knock at the clinic door.

He frowned. “I hope this isn’t Cadence back already. I was just gonna text them to bring us back some caffeine.”

When he opened the door, a frantic-looking Nurse Joy was standing there. “We need a clinician upstairs right away,” she said. “It’s an emergency- the Pokemon could explode at any moment!”

A lot of Doc-locke stuff at play here. The size and amenities at the clinic is actually an important gameplay mechanic here. You start off with a certain amount of space to store Pokemon, measured in units. The size of the Pokemon determines how many units of space it takes up. And some Pokemon, like Phoenixfall, require special living conditions. If you don't have the space for a Pokemon, they have to be left outside. This leaves them at risk for their illnesses worsening or even to develop new injuries fending themselves against the elements and wild Pokemon.

Comet's thoughts on challenging the gym were my exact thoughts while playing. Since Bravewhisker's condition had worsened, he can a certain percent chance of dying at the end of every day. Even though I would have liked to have more time to grind, I couldn't risk ending the day and losing Bravewhisker for this gym.
 

Trollkitten

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Gatto Region
Nature
Quirky
Pronouns
She/her, Aetherai Lorekeeper
Pokémon Type
  1. Fairy
  2. Clever
Pokédex Entry
Autistic writer who starts more things than she finishes. Hyper asexual lorewriter and worldbuilder. Rather be a happy shill than an angry critic.
Technically, Spikepelt was the one who assaulted that merchant... but of course everyone blames the trainer. (To be fair, Comet might not be the best influence, but I'm sure Spikepelt doesn't care either way.)
 

ACottontail

Johto League Champion
Pokédex No.
2364
Caught
Aug 20, 2020
Messages
580
Nature
Timid
Wow, the tension is really building up here. Comet is wanted, has to face the gym tonight, has to get enough money to care for Phoenixfall and has to deal with an about to explode pokemon. I could really feel Comet's stress as he tried to work out the funds needed to care for Phoenixfall. Comet has barely been doing this for two days and I already feel like he needs a vacation. But I doubt that things will calm down anytime soon. If anything I fear it's just going to continue ramping up. Comet being in love with Cat so soon is a bit of a warning flag. I want her to be nice, but she also keeps being framed in ways that make her somewhat suspicious, or at least there is something more going on. Still it was pretty funny when Comet wanted black hair like his soul. He's just so done with everything that he's going emo now XD
 

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