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Comic Kanto General Mon The Fire Within: Pokemon FireRed Nuzlocke

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Just a regular nuzlocke, following the adventures of a regular boy... Who doesn't want to battle for some reason.

SnowyUmbreon

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When left alone, this solitary creature spends hours reading stories and playing video games. She spends an unhealthy amount of time on the computer.
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Welcome The Fire Within, a FireRed Nuzlocke comic following the journey of Lysander, son of Maria* (daughter of Lysandre) and N. Follow him on his journey through Kanto as he learns what it means to follow your passions without fear. Together with his Pokemon, they will all discover the secret passions and power that lie within themselves.

WARNING: As a Nuzlocke, this comic will contain death, violence, and swearing on some occasions.

SCHEDULE: The Fire Within updates the first Monday of each month. It will start updating more frequently once I've built up enough buffer.

IMPORTANT DOCUMENTS:

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CONTENT:
Prologue


 
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Velink

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Lyle Sanders grandson of Colonel Sanders?
I haven't finished reaidng because DA's viewing setting no longer resize it easy to read size
But good luck on the run and god speed on the comic

Based on the starters, did 'Lyle' parents has story that encompass Unova, Kalos, and Kanto?
 

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What an interesting premise! I love that Lysander's reasoning for picking Bulbasaur is to avoid being like his mother - a very nice way of showing that family conflict. Having a mute starter is also really interesting, but look at the talented little fella spelling words out with his vines! That's some great visual creativity. You've done a good job of setting up team personalities and conflicts, they're all very fun to read playing off each other. That bonding scene with Hercules was especially touching.
 

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Lyle Sanders grandson of Colonel Sanders?
I haven't finished reaidng because DA's viewing setting no longer resize it easy to read size
But good luck on the run and god speed on the comic

Based on the starters, did 'Lyle' parents has story that encompass Unova, Kalos, and Kanto?

I'll have to go through the old pages and fix the viewing settings. Thanks for letting me know!
Thanks for the luck!
Lysander's mother went through both Unova and Kalos, but also received a Squirtle from Professor Sycamore.
 

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So I've read a bit of this already, I like the premise of a trainer that doesn't really want to fight, its not something I've seen before when it comes to Nuzlocke comics, also like how 'Lyle's' Bulbasaur is able to communicate using its vines, gestures and writing on the ground.

Also as a suggestion, you might want to compile your pages into something like Comic Fury or Tapas for ease of access for binge readers given you've a number of comic pages already. Or if you rather stick with DA, I suggest making a gallery folder with your comics in reading order, as you can use the arrow keys to better navigate them, Eclipse having a really crappy navigating system now doesn't really make it friendly for binge reading unfortunately. EDIT: Woops, I found that you DO have a folder for it :P Instead, I recommend making it a more visible gallery or linking it from your original post in this thread .u.b
 

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This comic has so many little details that are absolutely adorable! I particularly liked the Charmander's hair and the Bulbasaur signing "mute" with its vines. And, of course, I appreciated the glorious cornea pun - any Nuzlocke which finds an excuse to add stupid puns is a good Nuzlocke in my book haha
 

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And now I am truly on speed
The team dynamic seems pretty diverse so far, a lot of love and hate everywhere

one thing that I am very curious so far is how did Lyssander originally plan to prove himself not just some champions' son outside of Pokemon battling?
 

SnowyUmbreon

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What an interesting premise! I love that Lysander's reasoning for picking Bulbasaur is to avoid being like his mother - a very nice way of showing that family conflict. Having a mute starter is also really interesting, but look at the talented little fella spelling words out with his vines! That's some great visual creativity. You've done a good job of setting up team personalities and conflicts, they're all very fun to read playing off each other. That bonding scene with Hercules was especially touching.

Thank you so much for the feedback, it means A LOT!!! Aladar is such a talented little boy, and I love him. Thankyou! Somuch!


So I've read a bit of this already, I like the premise of a trainer that doesn't really want to fight, its not something I've seen before when it comes to Nuzlocke comics, also like how 'Lyle's' Bulbasaur is able to communicate using its vines, gestures and writing on the ground.

Also as a suggestion, you might want to compile your pages into something like Comic Fury or Tapas for ease of access for binge readers given you've a number of comic pages already. Or if you rather stick with DA, I suggest making a gallery folder with your comics in reading order, as you can use the arrow keys to better navigate them, Eclipse having a really crappy navigating system now doesn't really make it friendly for binge reading unfortunately. EDIT: Woops, I found that you DO have a folder for it :P Instead, I recommend making it a more visible gallery or linking it from your original post in this thread .u.b

Ah! Thanks! I haven't really seen it too much either, and thought it would be really interesting! Your feedback gives me a lot to think about, and I'll make sure to take into consideration all of your suggestions for comic organization. Eclipse... Really isn't very comic-friendly.


This comic has so many little details that are absolutely adorable! I particularly liked the Charmander's hair and the Bulbasaur signing "mute" with its vines. And, of course, I appreciated the glorious cornea pun - any Nuzlocke which finds an excuse to add stupid puns is a good Nuzlocke in my book haha

Yes! I love puns! The more cringe the better!


And now I am truly on speed
The team dynamic seems pretty diverse so far, a lot of love and hate everywhere

one thing that I am very curious so far is how did Lyssander originally plan to prove himself not just some champions' son outside of Pokemon battling?

I don't know if you meant on speed or up to speed, but both are relatable.
Yes, yes, yes! Team interactions have always been my favorite things to explore... If you take a bunch of different Pokemon species from a bunch of different areas and backgrounds... There's sure to be some disagreement and some shenanigans.
Oof, that's a question I never thought about! Time to do some character exploring!

I can't thank everyone enough for all of the feedback! It means a lot to hear from other amazing artists about how this comic is succeeding and how it could possibly be improved! Also, it makes me cry tears of unbound joy that people are actually reading this?!?! I love you all.
 

SnowyUmbreon

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First Monday of the month, time for a new page!

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HI HELLO THAT DEATH SCARE WAS TERRIFYING
I absolutely thought Rapunzel was a goner for a moment, STAB normal attacks really don't mess around. That panel of Lysander sleeping is an exhausted mood, if I've ever seen one. Even if Rapunzel pulled through, I'm curious to see what kind of effect this near-death experience will have on the team.
 

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MY HEART DROPPED HOW DARE YOU DO THIS TO IT
 

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HI HELLO THAT DEATH SCARE WAS TERRIFYING
I absolutely thought Rapunzel was a goner for a moment, STAB normal attacks really don't mess around. That panel of Lysander sleeping is an exhausted mood, if I've ever seen one. Even if Rapunzel pulled through, I'm curious to see what kind of effect this near-death experience will have on the team.
Ooof, I thought she was a goner too in actual gameplay... That crit STAB Quick Attack gave me quite the scare! I was so happy that she pulled through though~~~

MY HEART DROPPED HOW DARE YOU DO THIS TO IT
DON'T BLAME ME, BLAME THE CRITS

ooh at least Rapunzel survives
She's too baby to die

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I have kind of an intermission page here. Worried about Rapunzel, Mickey decides to lie next to her so he can hear her breathing. This ends up lulling him to sleep. Cute rat baby!!! >w<
 

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Awww that's adorable! I love the size difference between them, and it's nice to see a sweet, quiet moment after the near death scare.
 

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So The Fire Within..... can I first say my GOODNESS YOUR IMRPOVEMENT IS AMAZING!!! Like your expressions have gotten so much better, your composition, your poses, your everything! It's so cool to see these longer comics only cause you can SEE that progress. You can really see the growth and I legitimately felt really happy just seeing it. Everything felt like it was an upgrade so you should be proud of yourself!

But of course im not just here to talk about improvement. Im here for the plot! First I love that most of the pokemon are named after Disney characters, that makes it really fun and I loved the lil extra of "Be a man". I really like your story for Lysander and the fact that he was past trauma that figuratively and literally scared him. The idea of a kid that young going through that like... dang I know there's a lot of hesitant protagonists but he's really got a reason here. I also really liked you didnt just immediately shirk him back into battling right away. I really love the idea that Team Rocket is the bigger evil here to that of his fears, like yes of course hes still probably worried but he knows Team Rocket has to go. It's a good way to tie him in without forcing him. As for the other mons, I love how they all have distinct personalities and bounce off each other in different ways. They all care for each other at the end of the day, but have thier own way about it. I love the literal fact that Tarzan is a smart mankey, Mulan is just fun to read, Mickey makes me smile cause hes a sweet rat in bad boy clothing. And finally Aldar, did I mention I love him? Its so cool hes a mute pokemon yet you use his whips to let him express himself. Its such a unique idea for the starter and you execute it really well!!

Goodness gracious I am very excited to nominate this as Most Improved Nuzlocke.
 

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So The Fire Within..... can I first say my GOODNESS YOUR IMRPOVEMENT IS AMAZING!!! Like your expressions have gotten so much better, your composition, your poses, your everything! It's so cool to see these longer comics only cause you can SEE that progress. You can really see the growth and I legitimately felt really happy just seeing it. Everything felt like it was an upgrade so you should be proud of yourself!

But of course im not just here to talk about improvement. Im here for the plot! First I love that most of the pokemon are named after Disney characters, that makes it really fun and I loved the lil extra of "Be a man". I really like your story for Lysander and the fact that he was past trauma that figuratively and literally scared him. The idea of a kid that young going through that like... dang I know there's a lot of hesitant protagonists but he's really got a reason here. I also really liked you didnt just immediately shirk him back into battling right away. I really love the idea that Team Rocket is the bigger evil here to that of his fears, like yes of course hes still probably worried but he knows Team Rocket has to go. It's a good way to tie him in without forcing him. As for the other mons, I love how they all have distinct personalities and bounce off each other in different ways. They all care for each other at the end of the day, but have thier own way about it. I love the literal fact that Tarzan is a smart mankey, Mulan is just fun to read, Mickey makes me smile cause hes a sweet rat in bad boy clothing. And finally Aldar, did I mention I love him? Its so cool hes a mute pokemon yet you use his whips to let him express himself. Its such a unique idea for the starter and you execute it really well!!

Goodness gracious I am very excited to nominate this as Most Improved Nuzlocke.

Again, thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment! It means a lot to me that people care about this story and these characters that have been living in my head for years, especially enough to leave long and beautiful comments so thank you!!!

The improvement is something I feel so deeply because when I first started this comic, I didn't really feel like my art was good enough to be made into a comic. But like, dang I didn't even realize that making a comic would help my art to improve so much, and it just warms my heart that other people are able to power through that early mess and see the improvement in the later pages! I'm so glad it makes you happy as well!!!

Hehe, I did go through this run with a Disney name theme. I'm Disney trash, I admit it.

I knew from the beginning I wanted Lysander to be different from a lot of other Nuzlocke protags in that he doesn't want to battle. He just wants to live a peaceful existence with a bunch of Pokemon friends. Ultimately, I knew Lysander needed to make the decision to battle on his own. And hey, what better way than challenging a criminal organization that's trying to take over the entire country?

OMW, team dynamics are my FAVORITE thing to play around with because... Just imagine all these different creatures from different backgrounds who are all thrown together for some wild, random adventure. And they all have different reasons for being there, so there's bound to be a little tension and uptightness (I'm looking at you Hercules). And gosh, you're descriptions of the team are so spot-on and make me smile. I love subverting expectations, which is why Tarzan is a complete nerd, because who would ever expect that? I'm so glad you find Mulan fun to read! She's very fun to write! AND OMW I love your analysis of Mickey!!! It's spot-on! AND ALADAR, my sweet, precious baby! *forehead smooches* I've seen the mute starter thing done a few times before (maybe once or twice if I'm remembering correctly?), but I felt like a grass type could offer new possibilities, since they could create their own kind of sign language with vines.

I'm going to be redundant and thank you again for reading and commenting and making my day!!!
 

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New page!

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Team dynamics are my bread and butter, and this is one toasty page
 

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Lysander looks like he haven't slept in a month, poor lad, he must've been so worried about his Pokemon. As nice as it is to see a trainer caring for their Pokemon, I just want him to have a good, long nap.
Rapunzel being as tiny as she is is still adorable, and it's so sweet to see her wanting to protect the team despite her timid nature. Mickey's viewpoint worries me though, poor guy doesn't sound like he values himself as a team member that much...
 

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New Page!

Lysander looks like he haven't slept in a month, poor lad, he must've been so worried about his Pokemon. As nice as it is to see a trainer caring for their Pokemon, I just want him to have a good, long nap.
Rapunzel being as tiny as she is is still adorable, and it's so sweet to see her wanting to protect the team despite her timid nature. Mickey's viewpoint worries me though, poor guy doesn't sound like he values himself as a team member that much...
Yeah, Lysander was very worried about his child, and he probably didn't sleep very well, poor baby!!! HE DOES NEED A LONG NAP!
Yes, Rapunzel is precious, and she will do anything to protect her team! As for Mickey... Poor boy has self-value issues, reasons for which will be explained later!

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New page! Not much to say about this page. It's more of a transitionary page. I spent at least 6+ hours on that last panel. I would have added some more cameos and some actual vehicles, but... I'd already spent WAAAAAAY too long on the panel and couldn't bring myself to do it.

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OHHHH THESE TEAM INTERACTIONS GOT ME GOOD,,,
I love how loving and sweet the relationships between the team is here. Just the little reminders from the team that Rapunzel is worth more than the ruined clothes is so genuine and real it warms my heart. Also Lysander petting Rapunzel's tiny head is so cute 😭
Given that Hercules looked a bit upset and jealous last page, I'm almost wondering if his interruption, while a correct observation, was a bit out of spite. Poor dude.
That last panel looks great! Love all of the details and the design of the buildings, especially that cool looking gym. The little cameos are adorable too! Your art has improved an insane amount over this comic's duration and that is so admirable. Great work!
 

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