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War. Most of the time it's against another place, but sometimes the act of war happens against each-other. And as Queen Cynthia grows more and more ruthless, a group of ragtag Pokemon decide to put an end to her reign.

Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
Ok so this is the master post to each post of the nuzlocke (So that people don't get lost)



Another thing is the rules
Rule 1- If a Pokemon faints it is considered dead and must be kept in the box.
Rule 2- you can only catch the first Pokemon on a route, if it faints or runs away then tough luck.
Shiny clause- Even though the chances are increased shinies are still rare.
Dupes clause- I prefer to have a wider variety of pokemon, so this rule is in affect, though species clause isn't.
Rule 3- You must nickname every Pokemon
Rule 4-If all of your Pokemon die, including the PC Mon, then the run is over,
-the reason why the PC clause is included is because renegade platinum is one of those hacks that you can win a nuzlocke in, it's just a pain in the ass to, and I need all the chances I can get.

And finally my team (So far)

Messenger the Piplup
Winter the Leafeon
Sparrow the Wingull
Sparky the Shinx
Mocha the Pichu
Cockatrice the Torchic

Cosmo the Starly
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #2
Messenger would have liked to know what it was like to have a parent. Someone to look up to and teach him how to do things. Instead he ended up with just his sister, Winter. He sighed as he scavenged, looking for anything he and her could eat... His scavenging was interrupted by a kick. "What the distortion!" He yelled, looking at the Pokemon who had kicked him, a Turtwig, who looked like he was ready to brawl. Messenger wasn't having it "Find your own scraps!" He yelled, and was about to continue.

Until he got another kick and decided to just fight. A couple kicks from messenger later and a bubble the Turtwig went running. "Get your ass over here!" Yelled the Piplup, running after him until reaching the local lake. He looked and was surprised to see a Sneasle 'Never seen one of those around here.' he thought, the sneasle was talking to himself. "... The crossbloods sha'll learn that they are no match for Galactic..." Messenger winced at the term 'crossblood' the Queen had made it, saying that 'They betray there pure blood, allowing it to be infected' he rolled his eyes at the thought and grimaced.

He decided to leave the lake and head home. Just before he reached it though he found an eevee, his sister Winter. Her fur was singed, especially around her muzzle, which was completely singed and horrible. She was coughing and making squeaking sounds, unable to even speak. He quickly ran up to her and realized the damage, the entire village was alight, smoke rising as he grabbed the singed eevee and ran, he needed to get to Sandgem, that's where the closest pokecenter was.
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Edit 6/8- edited the ending because of something I'll be doing later

So for each of these I'll put 3 world building facts, since I might need to explain some things.
- In this universe if two different species of Pokemon breed rather then making the Pokemon the mother is they get a hybrid, what Pokemon they are is determined by the mother, unless it's mother is a ditto.
- The way a ruler is decided is through battle, you must beat the 8 major city leaders and then the queen/king's inner circle before facing them in battle, this is known as the champion system.
- If an eevee is a hybrid and it's mother is evolved then they will look more like the mother until they evolve. In which they gain more of their fathers physical attributes, this is due to how strange Eevees genetic makeup is.

That's all I have for now!
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #3
Winter had no idea why this was happening. She had been drowning in wakes gym with the rest of the team why was she alive, and instead of Ben there was Messenger. She didn't know when the fire happened, hoped it didn't happen, but it did, and she had tried to run but her muzzle... It had went alight. She had ran and ran and ran, not noticing her muzzle was no longer alight. She remembered seeing Messenger, and then she woke up to bright white lights, to much like Wakes gym, she looked at her paw immediately, hoping to see a long light blue one with a sock like pattern, only to find a Pale brown.

She had tried to sigh but her mouth barely moved, her eyes adjusting more to the bright light as she jumped off the bed and looked around, eventually finding a mirror and staring for a few minutes 'Ar-Winter this can't be real' her mouth had multiple little stitches, and patches of fur on her muzzle were gone, she realized that a Nurse was in the room, ready to escort her out. When she was eventually brought back to her 'Brother' he was talking to a Starly with a few orange feathers and long legs, and a Wingull who had a little pink flower growing out of her beak. "Oh Winter, how are you..." He looked at her for a few minutes in surprise "Your mouth..." He mumbled. Winter just shrugged and looked around for a nurse, her eyes landing on a Chansey. "Oh yes miss?" Asked the Chansey, handing her a piece of paper to write down her answer. 'Moar paper' winter wasn't sure if she spelt it correctly, but showed the nurse anyway.

The Chansey nodded and handed her a few pieces of paper. The Eevee went back to the small group of Pokemon "Oh Winter your back!" Exclaimed Messenger. 'Hav any plans?' wrote Winter. "I didn't know you could write... what does it even say?" Asked the Piplup. 'of course he can't read...' thought Winter. "Oh, I can, I guess the plan is get to oreburgh, me and Sparrow have a friend there that can help." stated the starly "oh and We forgot to introduce ourselves, I'm Cosmo." Stated the Starly, twitching his wing. "And I'm Sparrow." Stated the Wingull. The flower on her beak made Winter grimace 'Glad it isn't a sunflower...' she remembered seeing those awful sun flowers in the water, watching as the only water type on the team choked on them.

'This is the present Aru- Winter, keep it together.' she thought.

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World building facts-
-There is a strange thing that can happen to certain Pokemon, especially water and grass types, if one becomes too stressed a flower might grow out of them. In the case of Sparrow it was the fire.
-There are two types of damage, battle damage and physical damage. battle damage is much more common and can be easily healed by eating,drinking, or potions, unless it's something major,in which a Pokemon might need to head to a poke center. physical is more permanent, most likely needing a doctor's inspection.
-Cities in this universe are places that have gyms, though some towns might be referred to as cities even if there is no gym.

This most likely sucks but I'm trying.
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
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Cosmo sighed as he sat on Messengers head. Looking over at Winter he saw Sparrow on the Eevee's back, daydreaming. He just hoped they didn't run into any- "Hey Cosmo, that you?" Nevermind this was slightly worse. "Oh hi! Hey is she the frien-" "No." Cosmo cut Messenger off. The shinx that had recognized him pranced up to the group, a look of excitement on her face. He scowled at her, as she talked to Messenger, with Cosmo mostly ignoring the conversation, keyword, mostly.

"...And for some reason he kept on asking me if I worked for Fantina, something about giving her a new 'lab rat', for some reason he thought I was lying when I said no..." He grimaced at the name Fantina, he had no idea how she became a gym leader, she gave people ribombee dust for Verity's sake! 'Goes to show how fucked up this region really is.' he thought 'yep it is' 'shut up Federico...' he never knew why the spirit followed him. Heck it was the whole reason he was in this mess, hiding from the league because a ghost posessed him and broke 3 laws. He suddenly realized that they weren't in Sandgem anymore, but Sandgem valley. "Home sweet home." Stated the Shinx, standing in front of a large, hollow log. 'Spaky this is a hollow lig' wrote Winter, having misspelled Sparky and log. "Yeah, this is where I sleep." She stated "And its getting pretty late, come on everyone let's get in the log!" Exclaimed Sparky.

"Motherfucker..." He heard Sparrow mumble and looked toward her and suddenly noticed something. The cursed carnation was a bit bigger then it was the last time he checked. 'Atleast it isn't Hanahaki...'

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World building facts-
-Pokemon battle for two reasons 1) for sport and 2) because of the fact that a Pokemon can't bottle up there powers for too long, if they do they can either die, go into a coma, or lose all sense of humanity. Pokeanity? Whatever.
-Though it is commony accepted Arceus created the universe, people seem to have different opinions on who created the earth, an example is in sinnoh where most believe that Arceus himself made earth, but in Johto and Kanto it is believed that ho oh and Lugia found the Earth and gave it life, it all depends on the mon though.
-With some hybrids it's hard to tell if they are one or not, but sometimes it becomes clearer when they evolve. An example is Sparky, who is half pyroar but the only hinto of it is her hair tuft, which if differently colored, but if when she becomes a luxio the only part of her mane grows in and she will become lankier but taller then a luxio.

I probably worded things a bit wrong, but to be fair it's 4 am and I should probably get some sleep
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
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  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
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Sparrow awoke to the pitter patter of rain and her beak aching, the Carnation growing from her beak a little bit larger. 'How big can this thing even grow?' she thought as she felt Cosmo stir next to her, and shook a little as he opened his eyes, a few minutes later Sparky awoke, and then Winter, and finally Messenger. the group had decided to come up with a few plans, the rain subsiding with how long they talked. "Might need to train a bit just in case..." "Make sure none of the Queens circle catch us..." "Make sure Galactic doesn't catch us, Fantina gets her 'Lab rats' that way..." And then they were off. They did train a bit, and she finally learned how to shoot water out of her beak, though her beak ached when ever she did, so she didn't do it often. Sparky ended up getting a bit too excited and almost zapped Winter,who wrote down so many profanities so quickly you couldn't even read it, a snicker escaped Cosmo at this while Messenger stood confused at what she even wrote in the first place.

Then once again they were off, encountering a large Chimchar when they reached Jubilife. "Psst, over here..." whispered the Chimchar noticebly not having the usual markings and instead a black belt like marking. "Over here." He stated, causing confusion crossing the faces of everyone, including Winter, who usually wore a bored expression on her face. They walked over to him anyway.

"The names Looker, member of the Rebellion, you heard on the paper?" He asked. 'Ne and messenger were too poor to get the paper' wrote Winter, only getting 'Me' wrong. "Well either way, would you like to-" "No" 'No' "No" "No" "Yes" everyone just stared at Sparky. "Not like I have anything better to do." She stated. "Geez are you guys mind readers?" He asked "No" "No" "No" "No" 'Maybe.' this time everyone looked at Winter. 'What?' soon after Looker just tried getting them into his rebellion, again. But no one really cared and instead walked away to find the nearest Center.

The group exited the center, feeling refreshed and ready, Winter having gotten some more paper. They walked toward Floaroma wilds when suddenly-"Piiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii" a high pitched cry came from a small bush, close to the Jubilife School. The first to investigate the noise being Winter, using her paws she pulled out a small, crying Pichu from the bush, besides the fact it was alone there was one noticable factor, it's ears and tail had little black Poof's at the end, similarly to a buneary. The Pichu stared up at the Eevee for a few minutes, before clinging onto her light brown paw and Giggling.



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World building facts-
-The current time period is similar to the 1910s.(though instead of cars they have wagons.)
-Animals do exist, there's just not as many as there are Pokemon, animals are how carnivorous Pokemon eat.
-Arceus doesn't know what to think of their creations or the other legendarys, because the other legendarys are constantly getting into feuds over wars and his creations keep on getting into these wars.
 
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sky_

life is a trip alright
Screenshotter
Team Alpha
Pokédex No.
181
Caught
Jun 30, 2019
Messages
330
Location
somewhere quiet
Nature
Gentle
Pronouns
they/them
Pokémon Type
Ghost, Normal
Pokédex Entry
this ghost tries hard to be cool, but ends up keysmashing about cute things anyway. they wish they could take on more work than they have time for.
Oooooh, a renplat run! Definitely not the easiest one to nuzlocke by any means, though the variety of Pokemon is nice - that early Eevee is always epic xD These worldbuilding notes in particular look really interesting, and it's always nice to see some new and original takes on the Pokemon world.

While I can think of some pointers that could help you to improve your story so far, I don't want to give constructive critique unless I know that you would like to receive it. So if you would be happy to receive some, please let me know. :) In the meantime, best of luck with the rest of the run!
 

Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #7
Oooooh, a renplat run! Definitely not the easiest one to nuzlocke by any means, though the variety of Pokemon is nice - that early Eevee is always epic xD These worldbuilding notes in particular look really interesting, and it's always nice to see some new and original takes on the Pokemon world.

While I can think of some pointers that could help you to improve your story so far, I don't want to give constructive critique unless I know that you would like to receive it. So if you would be happy to receive some, please let me know. :) In the meantime, best of luck with the rest of the run!
Thank you so much. And sure, I'm open to some constructive criticism, especially since this is my first time writing something like this.
 

sky_

life is a trip alright
Screenshotter
Team Alpha
Pokédex No.
181
Caught
Jun 30, 2019
Messages
330
Location
somewhere quiet
Nature
Gentle
Pronouns
they/them
Pokémon Type
Ghost, Normal
Pokédex Entry
this ghost tries hard to be cool, but ends up keysmashing about cute things anyway. they wish they could take on more work than they have time for.
Yeeeeeeet that's cool :) and legit like - it's clear that a lot of thought has gone into the worldbuilding in particular which is really cool, and makes me interested in looking at more xD The rule that Pokemon have to fight to use up their power, for example, is really unique and I can imagine it having a lot of intriguing implications (can you stop a Pokemon from fighting for a long time by imprisoning them, for example, and so condemn them to near-death). It's definitely something which would be so exciting to see play out in future updates if you want it to xD

What I think could be improved on initially is the grammar, because at the moment I find the story a little difficult to read as there are some mistakes. That's completely understandable as this is your first time writing something this, so there are just a few rules which can help the work to look cleaner and smoother :) First of all, proper nouns (nouns which name something specifically like a place or thing or Pokemon, eg: Eevee, Shinx, Sneasel, Lake Verity, Renegade Platinum) are always capitalised no matter where they are in the sentence. Words like "Queen ..." are also always capitalised, as are names. Second, speech goes on the next line when someone starts speaking. Then when someone else starts speaking, their line of dialogue starts on a new line. The first word in a line of speech is also capitalised.
"He-He's really…"

"Really what, huh?"

"Quick! Quick to think, like lightning." Amare's words almost tumbled out. "And sensitive! And brave, like real brave. No matter what's in the way - a serpent, a fearless foe - he'd be there. At the front lines, with little armour on -"

"Whoa, slow down." Drift laughed. "They don't call you a dreamer for nothing."

There are a couple of other grammar mistakes, such as the start of a sentence not always being capitalised, but what I've noticed is that those things are done fine in other parts of your story. So as a result, I think what could really help is you making sure that you proofread your work to check for grammar and spelling. I have to proofread everything I write all the time, else I make heaps of mistakes honestly slkfchjsdhfjkh so you're definitely not alone there haha xD some more information on things like proper nouns and speech can be found here https://www.grammarly.com/blog/proper-nouns/#:~:text=A proper noun is a,also sometimes called proper names. https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/topics/zr6bxyc/articles/zhqh92p

In terms of the story and pacing, one thing that I like is some of the little things which are put in - like some Pokemon not being able to read while others can, the currency thing where of course a bunch of poor Pokemon travellers are unable to buy the paper, the hybrid/"crossblood" thing and how others view is as wrong - all of these are really neat touches which help to flesh out the world more and make it your original piece.

What I would suggest to improve your story, however, is giving some more description regarding the characters and the setting. Your story seems very fast-paced at points, which is great for giving a more dramatic feel, but at other points (such as where the characters are resting) some description can really help to set the mood and atmosphere and tone. Let's take the example where Winter wakes up in the Sandagem Pokemon Center. We already have had the rush of this character escaping Wake's Gym, but this part of the story could have also been improved by focusing on Winter in the hospital in particular; taking the time to show how she's feeling and examining the setting around her. This can provide a contrast between the fleeting rush of her having to get out of the Gym, and then having her being stuck as she's lying injured in the hospital. This doesn't have to be through saying things like "she was disorientated" - straight-up telling the reader something like that is not typically a good way to go about things. But if we have some description, say - about blinding white hospital lights, her vision being blurry, the smell of cleaning products being almost overpowering, maybe voices talking loudly and then quietly and it being hard to pick out what they were saying - that can show that she is disorientated while conveying an idea of what the setting is like. It can also draw the reader into the scene more and emphasise to the reader certain feelings such of that of uncertainty. I also think that some more description of the characters which can help the reader to remember which Pokemon has which name, to make it as easy as possible for them to feel engaged.

But legit like - everyone starts somewhere and has had to write something new for the first time, and everyone has things that need improving about their writing. Honestly I think this story with this type of worldbuilding has a ton of potential, and the revolutionary setting is a very intriguing one so it will be really interesting to see where that goes xD also I feel like Winter the Eevee might become a Glaceon, which is awesome because Glaceons are so cool and graceful and I love them and skdjvghfdjkghd So of c I'll be following the rest of this, and I really hope it goes well xD

Edit: One thing that I forgot to say is that you can always edit the top post of this thread for your run, even if you can't delete it. You can get rid of the text in the top post that you don't want, and put some other text there instead that you do want. For example, a lot of nuzlockers like to give an introduction to their nuzlocke in the top post, which includes a table of contents to each story chapter and lists the rules that they'll be following in their run. They can also say who their current team is in a spoiler tag for the latest update - that sort of thing. You don't have to do that of c, but there's definitely a lot you can do with that top post so that it can say something that you want it to xD
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #9
Yeeeeeeet that's cool :) and legit like - it's clear that a lot of thought has gone into the worldbuilding in particular which is really cool, and makes me interested in looking at more xD The rule that Pokemon have to fight to use up their power, for example, is really unique and I can imagine it having a lot of intriguing implications (can you stop a Pokemon from fighting for a long time by imprisoning them, for example, and so condemn them to near-death). It's definitely something which would be so exciting to see play out in future updates if you want it to xD

What I think could be improved on initially is the grammar, because at the moment I find the story a little difficult to read as there are some mistakes. That's completely understandable as this is your first time writing something this, so there are just a few rules which can help the work to look cleaner and smoother :) First of all, proper nouns (nouns which name something specifically like a place or thing or Pokemon, eg: Eevee, Shinx, Sneasel, Lake Verity, Renegade Platinum) are always capitalised no matter where they are in the sentence. Words like "Queen ..." are also always capitalised, as are names. Second, speech goes on the next line when someone starts speaking. Then when someone else starts speaking, their line of dialogue starts on a new line. The first word in a line of speech is also capitalised.
"He-He's really…"

"Really what, huh?"

"Quick! Quick to think, like lightning." Amare's words almost tumbled out. "And sensitive! And brave, like real brave. No matter what's in the way - a serpent, a fearless foe - he'd be there. At the front lines, with little armour on -"

"Whoa, slow down." Drift laughed. "They don't call you a dreamer for nothing."

There are a couple of other grammar mistakes, such as the start of a sentence not always being capitalised, but what I've noticed is that those things are done fine in other parts of your story. So as a result, I think what could really help is you making sure that you proofread your work to check for grammar and spelling. I have to proofread everything I write all the time, else I make heaps of mistakes honestly slkfchjsdhfjkh so you're definitely not alone there haha xD some more information on things like proper nouns and speech can be found here https://www.grammarly.com/blog/proper-nouns/#:~:text=A proper noun is a,also sometimes called proper names. https://www.bbc.co.uk/bitesize/topics/zr6bxyc/articles/zhqh92p

In terms of the story and pacing, one thing that I like is some of the little things which are put in - like some Pokemon not being able to read while others can, the currency thing where of course a bunch of poor Pokemon travellers are unable to buy the paper, the hybrid/"crossblood" thing and how others view is as wrong - all of these are really neat touches which help to flesh out the world more and make it your original piece.

What I would suggest to improve your story, however, is giving some more description regarding the characters and the setting. Your story seems very fast-paced at points, which is great for giving a more dramatic feel, but at other points (such as where the characters are resting) some description can really help to set the mood and atmosphere and tone. Let's take the example where Winter wakes up in the Sandagem Pokemon Center. We already have had the rush of this character escaping Wake's Gym, but this part of the story could have also been improved by focusing on Winter in the hospital in particular; taking the time to show how she's feeling and examining the setting around her. This can provide a contrast between the fleeting rush of her having to get out of the Gym, and then having her being stuck as she's lying injured in the hospital. This doesn't have to be through saying things like "she was disorientated" - straight-up telling the reader something like that is not typically a good way to go about things. But if we have some description, say - about blinding white hospital lights, her vision being blurry, the smell of cleaning products being almost overpowering, maybe voices talking loudly and then quietly and it being hard to pick out what they were saying - that can show that she is disorientated while conveying an idea of what the setting is like. It can also draw the reader into the scene more and emphasise to the reader certain feelings such of that of uncertainty. I also think that some more description of the characters which can help the reader to remember which Pokemon has which name, to make it as easy as possible for them to feel engaged.

But legit like - everyone starts somewhere and has had to write something new for the first time, and everyone has things that need improving about their writing. Honestly I think this story with this type of worldbuilding has a ton of potential, and the revolutionary setting is a very intriguing one so it will be really interesting to see where that goes xD also I feel like Winter the Eevee might become a Glaceon, which is awesome because Glaceons are so cool and graceful and I love them and skdjvghfdjkghd So of c I'll be following the rest of this, and I really hope it goes well xD

Edit: One thing that I forgot to say is that you can always edit the top post of this thread for your run, even if you can't delete it. You can get rid of the text in the top post that you don't want, and put some other text there instead that you do want. For example, a lot of nuzlockers like to give an introduction to their nuzlocke in the top post, which includes a table of contents to each story chapter and lists the rules that they'll be following in their run. They can also say who their current team is in a spoiler tag for the latest update - that sort of thing. You don't have to do that of c, but there's definitely a lot you can do with that top post so that it can say something that you want it to xD
Thanks for the advice, I'll try my best to use it and improve, have a nice day.
 

Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
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  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
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Sparky looked curiously at the Pichu clinging onto Winter, the Eevee staring at him in curiosity, leaning her head downward to pick him up. A few seconds later she realized her mistake, Sparky giggling at her.

"What's a baby doing in the bushes?" Asked Messenger, ruffling his neck feathers. "Happens alot nowadays, parents usually leave their children near here, since the only Orphange is in hearthome...and Fantina is, you know..." He muttered.

Sparky didn't pay attention to the conversation between them, opting instead to help Winter.

"Need any help?" She asked the Eevee, who nodded in response.

Sparky leaned her head down, picking the Pichu up by the scruff, at this moment he started crying. Sparky had a look of confusion on her face, the rest of the group noticing the little Pichu crying.

"Why is he crying?" Asked Messenger, the Piplup walking towards the Shinx and Eevee.' 'I don't know, when Sparky got him off my paw he sfarted crting.' Winter had wrote, getting started and crying wrong.

"Maybe he doesn't like Sparky..." He mumbled something after that that Sparky couldn't hear, but whatever it was Sparrow could hear it and slapped him, though she winced and looked at her wing, quickly placing her wing back by her side. "No...Maybe he thinks Winter is his mom?" Guessed the Piplup, shrugging.

By now Sparky had put the Pichu down, and it was clinging onto Winter, most likely confirming Messengers theory.

"Wouldn't be your first time raising someone, considering I'm still alive." Stated Messenger, leaning against the wall of the school building, Sparky had forgotten they were in public and quickly looked around, luckily it was late enough in the afternoon that the only person around was the group and an old looking Bellsprout, who she was surprised wasn't a Weepinbell by now.

"Should we head back to the center or...." Asked Sparrow, making Sparky jump at her voice.

"Yeah, I guess, oh, you need to give my Nephew a name, Winter." Stated the Piplup, looking at the little Pichu, who had noticed its own curly tail and was playing with it like a Skitty, it reminded Sparky of how her and her sister would play......... she never knew what happened to her sister.

Winter wrote something down, showing it to the group when she was finished 'Mocha.'

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World building facts-
-There are two ways a Pokemon can evolve, experience and age. Experience is faster but a bit harder to evolve from, while age depends on how long a Pokemons lifespan is.
-Different types of Pokemon have different lifespans, an example is the Butterfree line only lasting 10 years while the Torterra line can last for hundreds of years.
-Ghosts are really strange in this, there are 3 types of ghosts, Biological, Undead and spirits, Biological are ghost Pokemon who were born ghosts, Undead are dead Pokemon who decided to become a ghost Pokemon, and spirits are ghosts that take the form of the Pokemon they were before they died, it's unknown what happens when an Undead ghost dies.

That's all I have for now, if anyone has any feedback feel free to tell me and with that, have a lovely day!
 
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Queen Canterbury

Conqueror of the Vermillion Gym
Pokédex No.
1806
Caught
Apr 11, 2020
Messages
22
Nature
Quiet
Pokémon Type
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The small Pichu looked up at the Eevee who was currently standing over him, aware of the other pairs of eyes on him, he didn't mind though. He simply clung onto her paw as she attempted to move him from his spot to no avail. She wrote something on a piece of paper and showed it to the group, of course the Pichu couldn't read it, being so young.

"Won't he cry" asked the Piplup. "Of course he will but we need to get moving to the center." Stated the Starly.

The Wingull walked up the Pichu and Eevee and Scooped up the Pichu in her beak, causing the Pichu to suddenly start bursting into tears.

She ignores this and the group headed off toward the center, the little Pichu crying the whole way there...

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I didn't have any Idea on what to write so sorry at how bad and short it is.

- There are two forms of aging, Physical and Mental, Physical is how old a Pokemon is, making it evolve through age, while Mental involves exp and evolution, it's also what age most use since the lifespans of Pokemon vary. let's say that Messengers physical age is 5 but his mental age is 13, but when he evolved into a Prinplup his mental age is 15, that's how it works.

-Most gym leaders are rather reclusive, with 2 exceptions, Maylene and Fantina, Maylene since shes always looking for people to interact with. And Fantina who is well known for being the reason hearthome knows alot about...medicine.

-In Sinnoh, berries are alot more common then actually thought to be, though most rare berries are kept in the gardens of the rich , common berries such as Pecha and Oran are common around many parts of Sinnoh, this myth is common only because of the cold Climate of Sinnoh, which have the longest Winter's of any region, and the shortest Summers.
 

Queen Canterbury

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It had been about two weeks since the group found Mocha, and a few days since Messenger started to wonder about things. He wondered why the Queen hated hybrids so much, why he couldn't just live his life normally, he sighed, looking back at his sister as she was attempting to teach her adoptive son to fight. He was surprised at how well Winter was doing at being a mother, she had taught the kid to walk on all fours surprisingly well, though it was hard to feed him since Winter couldn't even chew food for him, or whatever mammals did, Messenger didn't exactly know, he had been eating scraps and Oran berries his entire life. He looked over to the others, a second flower was growing out of Sparrow, the only indicated of what type being it's orange coloring. Cosmo nervously tended to her, offering her an Oran berry, she took the berry from his talon and ate it, wincing in pain from the flower that was growing from her beak.

Messenger wondered if he would ever had a friend like that, since Winter was always so distant to everyone, with him being the only person who really knew anything about her. He suddenly saw a flash of blue pass by and there she was. Sparky. She always talked and talked to Winter, he was surprised at how calm his sister was around her, almost as if the Shinx didn't bother her.

Mocha let out a sudden cry, everyone in the area wincing in pain. Messenger covered his 'ears' looking at the surprised Pichu, as it looked at the group.

"Oh the little one learned Disarming voice! I didn't even know Pichu could learn Fairy moves!" Sparky exclaimed, beginning to excitedly chatter away at Winter, who nodded her head as she looked at Mocha for a moment, and smiled.

It had been awhile since Messenger saw her smile, and she seemed so happy, he assumed it was because of Mocha learning something besides tackle and growl, though Messenger did have a thought on his mind as he stared at the group where he sat.

'When is something going to mess it up?'

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Filler! Because I couldn't come up with anything else to write and I've made my deadline for the post to this every Wednesday and didn't want to procrastinate

World building facts-

-Most hybrids are unable to reproduce, though this is not the case for all of them, since some Pokemon might have a similar enough genetic makeup to another to be able to reproduce.

-Mental age is more important then physical age, as Pokemon have many different life spans as mentioned before, the only way that physical age is seen as important is when a Pokemon will evolve through age, and how long until a Pokemon dies of old age.

-Biological ghosts are more horrifying then undead ghosts, this is because while an undead ghost doesn't need to eat, Biological ghosts who live in areas such as the Jubilife woods or other abandoned areas tend to eat anything that's found dead, this includes other Pokemon, they (usually) do not kill them themselves though.
 

Queen Canterbury

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It was finally time to continue on the journey to Oreburgh. Mocha had finally learned enough so that the group could get a move on, and Winter was happy. Though there was something about today that felt... Off to her. Specifically about Cosmo, she just didn't know what as they neared the exit of the town, an apartment nearby with flower pots lay on the windowsill, Sun flowers growing in them... she stared at them for a few seconds then looked away with a grimace. Suddenly a shout and before she knew it a Turtwig was attacking her.

'Motherfucker' was her only thought as she fought him, biting and tackling, she even ended up stealing his lunch. She looked around for the others, Messenger and Sparky were fending off a Starly from Mocha, and Cosmo and Sparrow were pecking at a Munchlax. The Munchlax put up one of its fingers, and all of a sudden a rumble was heard as rocks came colliding down, the only one who reacted in that very moment was Cosmo, as he pushed Sparrow out of the crossfire of the rocks...

"Cosmo!"


A sickening crunch came as the group stared at the rock pile, a dark grey, white and orange wing being the only thing visible of Cosmo as a dark red puddle pooled around him. Sparrow was what broke the silence

"Go the fuck away." She muttered, Winter only now noticing the crowd that had formed around the group, and how Sparrow just yelled the same thing over and over again, until the 3 Pokemon who they had just fought were gone and the crowd had dispersed. A few had tried to move the rocks, and Sparrow didn't stop them, until they tried to remove Cosmo, or what was left of him, when they did she started screeching and pecking at them until they went away. The only Mon left now besides the group was a Shroomish, she looked half starved and was staring intently at the Oran berry Winter had almost forgotten she stolen.

She pushed it towards the Shroomish and went to go comfort the grieving Wingull. Suddenly, she felt a tug on her tail and looked behind her to see Mocha.

"Why isn't uncle Cosmo waking up?" He asked, Winter suddenly freezing. She hadn't explained death to him, she never thought that this would happen, and she was pretty sure all her paper was stolen, so she couldn't even respond if she wanted to. She simply placed her paw on her son's head and attempted to put him on her back.

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Me: I'm so excited to use a Staraptor on this nuzlocke

Cosmo: *Dies*

Me: and Cosmo is dead.

So Mocha can speak now, oh and Cosmo is dead that too

World building fact:

- Sometimes muggings can be disguised as battles, like the one above... They usually don't turn out great
-Sometimes, if a Pokemon has a bit of psychic blood in them they might be able to feel when a certain event might happen, but not see it happen a head of time.
-No one knows how metronome works, it's almost only aloud to be taught to highly skilled pokemon due to how unpredictable it is, though.

That's all I have for now! If you have any feedback, tell me, and have a lovely day/night!
 

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Sparrow had finally allowed someone to bury Cosmo. She looked at the grave, a stone with a single garden Cosmo on it. She stared at the flower with disdain as she finally opened her wings, looking at the flower that had now bloomed on her wing, an orange garden Cosmo, her disdain grew just a bit more when she looked at it. She finally flew off, to look for her group, she wanted to just leave the grave behind and forget it ever happened.

"Auntie Spawwow!" She heard the high pitched voice of Mocha as she extended her feet to land.

She landed near the door of the Pokemon center ruffling her feathers as she looked at the group, an excited Mocha approaching her.

"Hey, where's uncle Cosmo?"

She cringed as he asked the question, he would have to learn about death soon if this ever happened again.

"Oh, he went ahead to make sure none of the bad guys got us." Lied Sparky , picking the Pichu up by his scruff, his fluffy tail twitching slightly. "Ok other Mama."

Sparrow looked at the Pichu, and then the shocked Sparky. Behind them Winter looked like she was going to laugh if it wasn't for the stitches along her mouth. Sparky eventually came out of her shock and carried Mocha to Winter, who looked up at her happily. Sparrow had almost forgotten about the question Mocha had asked as she focused on the slightly embarrassed, or flustered, she couldn't quite tell, Shinx. Finally after a while Messenger had come out of the center, wearing a pair of broken glasses on their head and carrying multiple pieces of paper in his blue flippers.

"Hey Messenger, whats up with the glasses?" Inquired Sparky. "Oh I found them in the trash and thought they looked cool!" They stated, taking them off for a second and putting them back on top of their head. Handing Winter her papers, and she immediately wrote something.

'We should probably get moving, We just need to pass through Orelife meadows.' she wrote, noticebly she had gotten better at writing and her scruff had became smaller. And the group was off to the woods, Sparrow only looking back at the town that held the grave to her best friend.

'I'll miss you, Cosmo...'

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Filler! Yeah I had no idea what else to write.

Also bad news, I don't have any world building facts for today, but I'll put some here when I come up with some.

That's all for now! If you have any feedback ,tell me, and have a lovely day/night!
 

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Sorry for no post on Wednesday, I was busy, expect a post either tonight or Friday.
 

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Sparky didn't know why her thoughts had started to wander more, it had only started happening recently and whenever she realized her thoughts were wandering it would always be about a specific someone. She never really understood why she had these thoughts, only that they happened. She was snapped out of her thoughts, as usual, when she heard the voice of Mocha "How long until we reach the new place?" Sparky jerked her head back to look at Sparky and Winter, the Eevee having stopped to write something down. 'Another 5 minutes' the Pichu on her back looked at the piece of Paper in confusion, unable to read what was written on it.

"Another 5 minutes." Sparky read aloud to him, the Pichu nodding while Winter looked at her with a look of thanks. Sparky's heart fluttered at that look and she quickly nodded before walking a bit faster then usual, almost bumping into Messenger.

"Woah, Sparky what's got you in a rush? Not like there's a certain time to get there." The Piplup stated, adjusting the broken glasses that here on the top of their head. "N-nothing!" She stated, quickly turning away from him and looking elsewhere, just in time to see an Abra holding a bone teleport away. 'Weird' she thought, as once again her mind began to wander. 'Why does everything have to be so complicated? Why does he keep calming me other Mama. They look so pretty. Why are my cheeks so warm?' she stopped at the last question as she thought about it. Why were her cheeks so warm? She continued on walking but this single question was the one topic her mind focused on.

She felt a tap on her shoulder and turned around to see Winter, a curious gaze on her face as she held a paper 'We're at Oreburgh gate.' had she really been thinking for that long. She looked into the tunnel that was the gate and entered and another thought entered her mind as she did.


'Why are my cheeks warmer?'

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Sparky is my favorite one to write so far, and considering what I have planned for her later on she's probably going to stay like that for awhile.

Anyways some news, the world building facts will now only be coming when I think of something, it is unfortunate but I can't really think of anything for them at the moment, so may the postly facts rip and become the once and a while facts.

Anyways that's all for now, have a lovely day/night! And if you have any feedback, tell me!
 

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Mocha looked around at the buildings before him as he clung to his mother's back, excitement filling his eyes as his mother walked a bit, he recognized the familiar roofs of the Mart and the center, blue and red respectfully.

"Mama! Mama! What is this place!" He exclaimed, as he noticed a fluffy white and light brown Pokemon, it looked like a torchic, but weren't torchic's orange? Sparrow had also saw him and flew up to him, signalling for the group to follow.

"Sparrow, good to see you!" They exclaimed, extending the smallest wings Mocha had ever seen in his 2 months of life and hugging the Wingull. "Hey Cockatrice, good to see you." She stated, wincing as Cockatrice accidentally touched the flower on her beak. "Well hello there sir... Or madam." Greeted Messenger, attempting to shake the Torhics wing.

Winter had also greeted them, but of course Mocha didn't know what she had wrote. Cockatrice seemed to nod though as they spoke with Sparrow and Messenger, Mocha had finally decided to go greet the new Pokemon, running up to them at his usual fast pace whenever he did walk. "Hello!" He greeted while the 3 spoke, stopping the conversation as the three looked at him. "Hey kid, umm, please tell me he's with you, I don't want to be arrested for existing, again." They stated, Sparky popping up besides the Pichu that was Mocha to answer "Yep! He's Winter's son!" She stated, flicking her tail towards the Eevee as she walked up beside Sparky, who had a weird look in her eyes Mocha had noticed before hand on the way to the new place.

"Well, we should probably head up towards the center, those guys never report anyone, probably because they haven't been payed...ever." stated Cockatrice, the group nodding as they headed towards the center, Mocha for once walking as well rather then being carried as a smile grew on his face.


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Ok, new schedule, from now on I will be updating every Thursday instead of Wednesday.

Anyways have a lovely day/night!
 
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Cockatrice yawned as they awoke, one of their tiny wings stretching as they got out of the seat they had been sleeping in and stepped on Sparky.

"Gahhh!" She yelled out, a shock coming out and hitting Cockatrice, who fell over. "Oh, sorry Cockatrice..." She stated, having woken up the rest of the team. Winter got up from her spot next to Messenger, Sparky, and Mocha, stumbling a bit as she wrote something. 'Why does everything feel so light?' she wrote.

"Probably the fact you just got woken up by someone screaming.... along with everything else within two miles." Stated Sparrow, wincing as she looked at her wing, where another flower was growing, not even a bud yet and just a seed. 'No, no, it's something weird.... Near the cave.' the Eevee wrote, walking toward a window and pointing a pale brown paw toward Oreburgh mine, her long ears twitching, Cockatrice could of sworn The Eevee looked a bit taller today.

"We could go investigate it... Who knows,maybe one of us will evolve in here." Suggested Messenger, light blue flippers adjusting the broken glasses on their head. "Yay! We're exploring!" Cheered Mocha, clutching onto Sparky's tail and climbing onto her back, Cockatrice realized that she had gotten a bit leaner since the last time they saw her before yesterday, a year ago if they remembered correctly. Cockatrice put a white wing on their black beak, before nodding.

"Yeah, that's a good Idea, all in favor of going raise their paw, wing, whatever the fuck you have." They stated, Winter giving them a death glare the at the last part but raisng her paw anyway, along with everyone else.

"Ok then, Cave exploration here we come!"

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Ok so Cockatrice is also a fun character to write, their a bit more on the carefree side but they also notice alot of things about a lot of people.

Any way have a lovely day/night! And if you have any feedback, tell me!
 
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Messenger followed the rest of the group into the cave, occasionally watching the others and what they were doing, such as Cockatrice talking about something with Sparrow, both having a face that Messenger knew a bit by now, and Sparky gazing at Winter. Winter. She was walking at a faster pace as she got closer and closer to the cave, almost at a gallop, and Messenger could have sworn she looked taller by the minute.

"Winter slow down your going to run straight into that-" Messenger unfortunately went unheard as with a wham the Eevee had ran into a stony wall near the cave entrance, a muffled groan was heard from her sewn together lips could be heard. After awhile she got up and carefully walked into the cave entrance, not walking as quickly as she had before as the rest followed. Messenger quickend his pace to make sure his sister was okay, Sparky had had the same idea because she was now next to Winter, asking her yes and no questions since Winter had forgotten her papers. The descent down the cave ended as they entered a tunnel in the cave, it took a second for Messenger to realize what they were looking at. A pile of rocks on the ground, an Onix looming over it with a pickaxe in it's mouth.

The Onix looked at the group curiously, particulary Winter, who was pawing at the pile of rocks, it went to pawing to smashing as she smashed her paw against the rock, her paw starting to bleed as she did.

"W-Winter what are you doing?!" Sparky and Messenger asked at the same time, approaching the pale Eevee.

Messenger didn't quite know what happened next, just that Winter had stopped and a white glow had surrounded the area. It came from the area Winter was standing in. He had closed his eyes as it happened, he heard his glasses fall off his head and the sound of shattering glass as he felt a small pain in his foot.

When the Pain hit his foot he opened his eyes and looked at the sight before him. There where his sister stood was a leafeon, though with a few noticable differences, the leafy parts of their body were a beautiful shade of dark teal, a spike looked to be protruding from their chest and surrounding their eyes was a leafy mask, stopping near the tear ducts and darker then all the other leafy parts. It took Messenger a moment to realize this Leafeon was Winter 'ironic' he thought as he looked at her.

The first to speak was Sparky "The Winter wonderland is now a Leafy wonderland!" She exclaimed, running up to the Leafeon and attempting to hug the Leafeon without stabbing herself with the spike on her chest, Mocha joined in, though he looked a bit confused it was understandable, he had never seen an evolution or seen someone change appearance so drastically in front of him. Messenger couldn't help but smile as he went to join the hug...

And completely forgot the shard of glass stuck in his leg.

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So I decided to go with the 'I don't know option' when asking for an evolution stone, and I got a leaf stone, so Winter is now a Leafeon!

Sorry for how late this one was, with hurricane Laura happening I didn't have internet.

Any way have a lovely day and if you have any feedback, tell me!
 
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this ghost tries hard to be cool, but ends up keysmashing about cute things anyway. they wish they could take on more work than they have time for.
Aaaaaaa I'm really really sorry for not commenting until now!! I didn't get the notification I think that you were updating for ages and ages, and have been off the forum for a while due to some very very big stressors regarding it, and was afraid to put stuff on my status like "hey i'm taking a break" in case it alerted the cause of the major stressors/problems D: it's a very long story, but I'm back to comment and will do my best to keep an eye on the thread as much as possible in future. I will go and read all the updates now and edit this to comment xD

EDIT: okay all done! and aaaaaaa there's so much i like here dkghfdkjgh the text is a lot easier for me to follow and keep up with now! i love all the subtle descriptions like the Turtwig emerging from the flowers. As well as adding to the atmosphere, it sells the idea of danger coming from every corner. And speaking of which...
'Motherfucker' was her only thought as she fought him, biting and tackling, she even ended up stealing his lunch. She looked around for the others, Messenger and Sparky were fending off a Starly from Mocha, and Cosmo and Sparrow were pecking at a Munchlax.
I remember this fight from my own RenPlat nuzlocke and it's really hard given the circumstances D: a Rock Tomb Curse Munchax with recovery is a real shock at the best of times. I'm sorry about Cosmo, that sucks D: (Also, I think double quotes might be better for the "Motherfucker" part because the rest of your speech is in double-quotes, not single, for the sake of consistency.)
There are two forms of aging, Physical and Mental, Physical is how old a Pokemon is, making it evolve through age, while Mental involves exp and evolution, it's also what age most use since the lifespans of Pokemon vary. let's say that Messengers physical age is 5 but his mental age is 13, but when he evolved into a Prinplup his mental age is 15, that's how it works.
Ahhhh okay so this is really interesting! The ideas about when Pokemon evolve and how developed they are is really cool for worldbuilding purposes. Also I say it might be "ageing" but that might just be the UK spelling dslkghdfjkgh
Cockatrice yawned as they awoke, one of their tiny wings stretching as they got out of the seat they had been sleeping in and stepped on Sparky.
Is this n-b rep? We stan and love n-b rep xDDD this rep always makes me feel happy haha
When the Pain hit his foot he opened his eyes and looked at the sight before him. There where his sister stood was a leafeon, though with a few noticable differences, the leafy parts of their body were a beautiful shade of dark teal, a spike looked to be protruding from their chest and surrounding their eyes was a leafy mask, stopping near the tear ducts and darker then all the other leafy parts. It took Messenger a moment to realize this Leafeon was Winter 'ironic' he thought as he looked at her.
Yeeeeet we stan Leafeon xD it's such a good RenPlat 'mon!! Also it's nice to see an Eevee which does not evolve into the most obvious thing for its name, as awesome and epic as Glaceon is. Worth bearing in mind to double-check words like "Leafeon" and "Hearthome" are always capitalised as they're proper nouns/names
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Mocha let out a sudden cry, everyone in the area wincing in pain. Messenger covered his 'ears' looking at the surprised Pichu, as it looked at the group.

"Oh the little one learned Disarming voice! I didn't even know Pichu could learn Fairy moves!" Sparky exclaimed, beginning to excitedly chatter away at Winter, who nodded her head as she looked at Mocha for a moment, and smiled.
Things like this are also really neat xD like it's nice to see the 'mons' moves being described so well instead of just being like "Pikachu used X". It also helps explain RenPlat mechanics to people who aren't so familiar with them which is super cool xD
 
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