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Comic Written Story Hoenn Mixed Media Teen Mon wee woo wee woo the FBI's here! Ch. 8

Thread Description
A story in which the MC is totally not a thief, as she goes through Hoenn NOT STEALING AT ALL.

lineonthepaper

eon
Artist
Screenshotter
Pokédex No.
582
Caught
Jul 26, 2019
Messages
38
Location
dumb land
Nature
Timid
Pronouns
she
Pokémon Type
Normal, ???
Pokédex Entry
Probably one of the dumbest yet luckiest Pokemon. Is terrible at socialising, yet has friends anyway.
Hi there! This is my log for HQ, to show that I'm actually a competent thief! Currently I'm going through Hoenn. Just sit back and let me show you what a great thief I am! (yeah totally hahaha I'm a great thief yes)

First, here are some of the rules HQ has given me:
  1. Regular Nuzlocke rules
    1. Nickname all Pokemon. - they’re our partners, not slaves.
    2. Catch the first Pokemon you see on each route.
    3. Any Pokemon that faints must be boxed and never used again. - HQ is super stringent about this stuff, and I have no idea why.
    4. Dupes clause is on! If I find a Pokemon of the same evolutionary family as a Pokemon I already have, I can choose not to catch it. - HQ wants variety
  2. Travel light - stealth! (nyoom)
    1. There can only be 3 Pokemon on a team at a time. (excluding Pokemon who are there just for HMs)
    2. Items pocket in my bag can only contain healing items and Pokeballs. This means no X items, and any held items must immediately be deposited or given to a party member once acquired.

Next, here are all my logs, to be updated as they come.

I'll update twice a week! Probably!
Jen stares at eon

Uh... okay fine yeah it might be once a week instead if I don't start writing faster

And this is my first log!

Just a little closer…


Ack! It’s you!
Wait, you’re not Brendan…


And who in the diddly darn hell are you?


Uh, my name is Jen. Yup. Totally.


Yyyyyes.


Right?
YEAH I AM UH HUH.


Why the HELL would you think it a good idea to try to steal a Pokemon from my son’s room, when there are so many of them just doing their own thing outside?


Um, shit.

Now I need to get rid of this “Jen” girl.

---

Phew. Now that that’s over and done with… Time to hope I remotely look like her and can even convince “my” parents!

But first, time to go downstairs!


Hey, I’m uh, Jen!



You poor thing, I heard about your family situation…
My what? O-oh, yeah, that! I uh… yeah boo hoo it sucks.
(Welp, guess I won’t have to worry about meeting her parents.)

So, uh, how'd you emerge from upstairs without coming through the front door?
(Fuck.) Uhhhh iunno WHOOPS MY MICROWAVE IS ON FIRE BYE

---

Sorry, HQ. I screwed up again.
- [redacted]​
 
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mondograss

Well-known member
Pokédex No.
680
Caught
Aug 15, 2019
Messages
25
Nature
Naive
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
Pokédex Entry
This Pokemon is infamously irritable, but it comes down from its rage quickly. It is quite loyal to kind, patient Trainers.
I did a nuzlocke of Platinum limiting myself to three fighting Pokemon at a time
It failed hard
Luck be with you
 

Rhema

Well-known member
Writer
Team Delta
Pokédex No.
212
Caught
Jun 30, 2019
Messages
112
Location
Hearthome City
Nature
Careful
Pronouns
She/Her/Hers
Pokémon Type
Fire, Psychic
Pokédex Entry
She tries her best, but doesn't succeed. She gets what she wants but not what she needs.
Hilarious. It's just so stupid (I mean that in the best way possible) and makes me laugh. Great start and I can't wait to read more!
 

lineonthepaper

eon
Artist
Screenshotter
Pokédex No.
582
Caught
Jul 26, 2019
Messages
38
Location
dumb land
Nature
Timid
Pronouns
she
Pokémon Type
Normal, ???
Pokédex Entry
Probably one of the dumbest yet luckiest Pokemon. Is terrible at socialising, yet has friends anyway.
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #5
I did a nuzlocke of Platinum limiting myself to three fighting Pokemon at a time
It failed hard
Luck be with you
thanks! thinking about it now, it actually sounds like really hard. oops.
heehee, good luck
[starters gonna DIE lmao]
PLEASE NO I HOPE NOT also thanks
Hilarious. It's just so stupid (I mean that in the best way possible) and makes me laugh. Great start and I can't wait to read more!
thanks! I can't wait to write more, either!

Glad I’m out of that situation.

Now, how should I get my first Pokemon? Oh, I got it. Theft!


AAAAA I’M BEING MAULED HEELPPPPPP


THIS MONSTER’S GONNA EAT ME ALIVE


HEELP MEEEEEE


I JUST NEEDED BREAKFAST, OKAY? CALM DOWN YOU LITTLE-
Oooooh there’s 3 of em! Hmm… but I’ll feel bad if I take more than one… Alright, what’s in these balls? Labels say… “Torchic”, “Treecko”, “Mudkip”.
Lemme think…
AAAAA HELP ME
Treecko could help me with my heists, being sly and speedy. Torchic would have the brute force needed to force things open if necessary. And Mudkip is… cute.
JUST HELP ME BEFORE I GET EATEN ALIVE


Hell yeah I do.


Bye now!
AAAAAAAAA SOMEONE ELSE HELP

---

A resounding success! I now have me a Mudkip! Stolen, too! I’m so proud of myself.

- [redacted]​

P.S. Oh yeah, and he says his name is Gerald. And I’ll respect that, as an honourable thief.

BOY THIS WAS FUN TO WRITE/DRAW HAHA
also, keep the replies coming! they make me so happy mmmm
 

lineonthepaper

eon
Artist
Screenshotter
Pokédex No.
582
Caught
Jul 26, 2019
Messages
38
Location
dumb land
Nature
Timid
Pronouns
she
Pokémon Type
Normal, ???
Pokédex Entry
Probably one of the dumbest yet luckiest Pokemon. Is terrible at socialising, yet has friends anyway.
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #6
no repp lies? :(




Huh. He’s actually gone. Guess he got dragged off by the rabid Zigzagoon. Oh well.


---


Well, time to meet my new partner in literal crime, I guess.
*pchoo* AGH WHO IN THE DIDDLY DARN HELL ARE YOU?
Funny, you speak just like the recently late Birch.

HE WHAT?

Calm down, I was joking. He’s still alive. I think. Anyway, I’m your new trainer! And also a thief. But shush about that. Was wondering, as a Water type, would you help me clean up my act? Eh? Eh??
*sigh* Of all people, why you?
Heyyy, I’m pretty good at battling. Why not let me show you?

A few tackles later…


See? You defeated the thing!
You almost got me killed! And it wasn’t even you doing the work, it was all me!
Heyheyhey, look at the Pokedex, it says you only lost 1/11 of your overall health. You’re fine. Sheesh.
Only 1/11? Bruh, have I got a lecture to give you about Pokemon health.
Alright, alright, calm. I get it. You don’t like to get hurt. Don’t worry, the more we battle, the stronger you’ll get. Don’t worry so much.
And where’d you even get that top-of-the-line Pokedex from? As far as I know, Professor Birch himself was only allowed 3 from the authorities, and he had to pay big money for them!
Shhhh. I nabbed it from the same briefcase you were in while he wasn’t looking. Not like he’ll need it, now that he’s well, dead and all.
Can you please stop making insensitive jokes about my previous trainer? Dammit. I actually liked him, y’know.
Well someone’s got a crush on their ex-trainer! Tell me, what does it feel to have your crush die-
STOP IT.
Okay, okay, I’m sorry!

short update this time, but FINALLY we meet the starter! who kinda maybe might like birch? unless...


also birch is dead crabrave
 

Sarbear

phobiaverse overlord
Pokédex No.
693
Caught
Aug 19, 2019
Messages
20
Location
Australia
Nature
Quiet
Pronouns
she/her
Pokémon Type
Water, Dark
Pokédex Entry
I'm in WIP hell, but at least it's warm down here.
rip birch
you wont be missed
🦀🦀
 

mondograss

Well-known member
Pokédex No.
680
Caught
Aug 15, 2019
Messages
25
Nature
Naive
Pokémon Type
Dark, Normal
Pokédex Entry
This Pokemon is infamously irritable, but it comes down from its rage quickly. It is quite loyal to kind, patient Trainers.
🦀MY PROFESSOR IS DEAD🦀
 

poopawman

High-end Procrastinator
Team Omega
Pokédex No.
343
Caught
Jul 2, 2019
Messages
64
Nature
Adamant
Pokémon Type
Water, Steel
Pokédex Entry
Used to be frequent, but has matured into a lazy son of a--
Ding dong professor's dead
Time to loot his wallet again
 

Hallow

music person
Team Delta
Pokédex No.
687
Caught
Aug 18, 2019
Messages
47
Location
twitter, probably
Nature
Naive
Pronouns
they/them
Pokémon Type
Water
Pokédex Entry
This Pokémon spends most of their time making music and forgetting to check the forum.
this is a fun read. rip to birch and yoink ALL the things
 

ZHODY

Member
Writer
Pokédex No.
245
Caught
Jul 1, 2019
Messages
42
Location
Solaceon Town
Pronouns
Female
Pokémon Type
Electric, Fairy
Pokédex Entry
ZHODY have minimal knowledge of almost every subject. They take pride in this.
dude, when did you start this run?? Bc it rules!!
keep it up, dude *finger guns* 👈🤠👈
 

antingaround

Nicole
Artist
Writer
Team Omega
Pokédex No.
228
Caught
Jul 1, 2019
Messages
7
Nature
Jolly
Pokémon Type
Bug, Steel
omg wtf I can't believe birch would literally die I'm literally shaking and crying so much rn 😳😳😳
 

lineonthepaper

eon
Artist
Screenshotter
Pokédex No.
582
Caught
Jul 26, 2019
Messages
38
Location
dumb land
Nature
Timid
Pronouns
she
Pokémon Type
Normal, ???
Pokédex Entry
Probably one of the dumbest yet luckiest Pokemon. Is terrible at socialising, yet has friends anyway.
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #13
hot damn, so many replies. makes me happy :D

rip birch
you wont be missed
🦀🦀
he's gone.
🦀MY PROFESSOR IS DEAD🦀
CRABRAVE
Ding dong professor's dead
Time to loot his wallet again
RIGHT I SHOULD'VE STOLEN HIS LUNCH MONEY
this is a fun read. rip to birch and yoink ALL the things
thanks! and i will, indeed.
dude, when did you start this run?? Bc it rules!!
keep it up, dude *finger guns* 👈🤠👈
thanks zhody! you can scroll up to see when my first post was
omg wtf I can't believe birch would literally die I'm literally shaking and crying so much rn 😳😳😳
oh god oh fuck he's dead

Exploring time! But first… who the hell is that?
Who in the diddly darn hell, you mean.
Yeah, sure.
Also, that's Brendan. The professor's kid.
Ahhhhh shit I apparently tried to steal his Pokemon earlier.

You WHAT?!

Don't worry, it's, uh, all in the past now. Yep.

And you're Brendan.
Yeah. What's up?
I definitely didn't try to steal your Pokemon earlier. I have my own, see?
She stole me- mmph!
Shh.

Mhm. Yeah. I didn't steal it. And your dad's alive.
He's better be- mmph!
Shhhh.

Sure. You betcha ass you're gonna get destroyed.

OUCH!
You're not looking too hot there. You alright? Need a Potion or anything?
Oh, and now the trainer shows concern, in front of another trainer!

Well, guess you're fine then. A quick trip to the Pokecenter should fix you right up.

---

Hey, battling's pretty fun! Sad that Gerald doesn't seem to like it, though.
- [redacted]​


YAY MANY REPLIES :D
quick question: would y'all rather i post often with short-ish updates or post not-so-often with longer updates?
 

Hallow

music person
Team Delta
Pokédex No.
687
Caught
Aug 18, 2019
Messages
47
Location
twitter, probably
Nature
Naive
Pronouns
they/them
Pokémon Type
Water
Pokédex Entry
This Pokémon spends most of their time making music and forgetting to check the forum.
does gerald not like battling... or does he just not like YOU

i think slightly longer updates would probably be a good thing! some of these feel maybe a bit too brief, although if it feels more manageable to do it in small chunks like this then absolutely just keep it as is of course
 

Sarbear

phobiaverse overlord
Pokédex No.
693
Caught
Aug 19, 2019
Messages
20
Location
Australia
Nature
Quiet
Pronouns
she/her
Pokémon Type
Water, Dark
Pokédex Entry
I'm in WIP hell, but at least it's warm down here.
brendan be doing a suspicion 👀
 

poopawman

High-end Procrastinator
Team Omega
Pokédex No.
343
Caught
Jul 2, 2019
Messages
64
Nature
Adamant
Pokémon Type
Water, Steel
Pokédex Entry
Used to be frequent, but has matured into a lazy son of a--
Q: short vignettes but save big ones for crucial points further on

Yeah, the professor's fine, he just fell on a cheri bush that's all. A huge cheri bush. Still, Jen does have some concern. Gerald, give her some time.
 

ZHODY

Member
Writer
Pokédex No.
245
Caught
Jul 1, 2019
Messages
42
Location
Solaceon Town
Pronouns
Female
Pokémon Type
Electric, Fairy
Pokédex Entry
ZHODY have minimal knowledge of almost every subject. They take pride in this.
answer: I don't care about update lengths (as long as it doesn't take me more than an hour to decipher it)
 

Minty Electronica

heeeeeeeyyyyyy, adora~ <3
Team Omega
Pokédex No.
146
Caught
Jun 26, 2019
Messages
251
Nature
Quiet
Pronouns
she/her
Pokémon Type
Water, Fairy
Pokédex Entry
It's an azumarill. You caught an azumarril.
Ah, "Jen" is a delightful, delightful person who is most definitely not a kleptomaniac.

In all seriousness, everything about this is just fun. Your illustrations (as beautiful as they are). Jen's dynamic with Gerald. Jen's general personality. Everything about this is fast-paced and hilarious so far (that entire "totally didn't do this" conversation with Brendan was just gold), and no doubt it'll be even more fun as the story progresses. Especially as Jen meets the hilarity that is Hoenn's evil teams. (Oh God. Jen with a rayquaza...)
 

lineonthepaper

eon
Artist
Screenshotter
Pokédex No.
582
Caught
Jul 26, 2019
Messages
38
Location
dumb land
Nature
Timid
Pronouns
she
Pokémon Type
Normal, ???
Pokédex Entry
Probably one of the dumbest yet luckiest Pokemon. Is terrible at socialising, yet has friends anyway.
  • Thread Starter Thread Starter
  • #19
does gerald not like battling... or does he just not like YOU

i think slightly longer updates would probably be a good thing! some of these feel maybe a bit too brief, although if it feels more manageable to do it in small chunks like this then absolutely just keep it as is of course
alright, thanks for the feedback! also, astute observation on gerald 👀
brendan be doing a suspicion 👀
he really do be
Q: short vignettes but save big ones for crucial points further on

Yeah, the professor's fine, he just fell on a cheri bush that's all. A huge cheri bush. Still, Jen does have some concern. Gerald, give her some time.
a huuuuuuge cheri bush, indeed. gerald needs to learn to CALM. thanks for the answer to my question!
answer: I don't care about update lengths (as long as it doesn't take me more than an hour to decipher it)
hmm, okay. thanks!
Ah, "Jen" is a delightful, delightful person who is most definitely not a kleptomaniac.

In all seriousness, everything about this is just fun. Your illustrations (as beautiful as they are). Jen's dynamic with Gerald. Jen's general personality. Everything about this is fast-paced and hilarious so far (that entire "totally didn't do this" conversation with Brendan was just gold), and no doubt it'll be even more fun as the story progresses. Especially as Jen meets the hilarity that is Hoenn's evil teams. (Oh God. Jen with a rayquaza...)
aww, this reply really makes me blush. i can't wait to see jen with a rayquaza either, trust me! thanks a lot for the detailed comment!

Hey look! It's a nice-looking lady/man/whatever I don't care just please grant me freedom.
Hey, wait!


Hey I didn't do anything illegal! Yet! I think! Don't be so quick to arrest me-


H-Hey wait, I'm supposed to be stealing this from you- Never mind I'm totally not a thief forget what I said- Thanks for the free Potion!
Wow, you're like, really bad at hiding your identity.
Shush!

---

New friend time!

Oh Arceus, must you make a big deal out of everything you do?
Shush!

Hey, uh, I couldn't mind but hear you-
Yeah, with how loud she is I'm sure-
Shush! Anyway, yeah?
You said- You said you were looking for… a friend?
Yeah-huh.
Could I- Could I- Could I be-

No. Wait, yes-
YES OMA I'VE ALWAYS WANTED A ZIGGY AS A PET YES PLEASE GET IN THE BALL ALREADY

Wait- *pchoo*


*pchoo* You didn't let me finish! And oh no oh no because of me you're gonna all die aaaaa-

Wait, wut? Did I just catch the Harbinger of Death or something?
:/// Something like that, yeah. My dad's an Absol.
Aww, shit.
Ehh, don't worry. It's not like I have good luck anyways. Welcome to the team! What's your name?

Minna.
Alright, let's get you up to speed with Gerald, if you don't mind battling a little?
Hey, how come I didn't get this kind of treatment when you stole me?
Shush!

Here, I found this and thought it might be useful!
That. That is why. Thanks, Minna!

---

Stuff's going great right now. Wish you were here, Supervisor!


- [redacted]​


i was bored.

minna is my baby and nONE SHALL HARM HER
 
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poopawman

High-end Procrastinator
Team Omega
Pokédex No.
343
Caught
Jul 2, 2019
Messages
64
Nature
Adamant
Pokémon Type
Water, Steel
Pokédex Entry
Used to be frequent, but has matured into a lazy son of a--
Lucky. My Odds Against Me run didn't net me a Zigzagoon until the final grass route of the game. But that's because I omitted routes 101 and 102 and allowed dupes. Anyways, welcome aboard, Minna!
 

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