A Universally Under-Rested University Imp
Ahhhhhh! I'm so glad my comments could help bring back your fire a bit! I'm still admidtly far from catching up,these comments are really such fuel to a fire that i think was going out right before the climax of the run.
Okay so, now on to chapters 5 & 6!
Ooooof. That's such a powerful starting line. For some reason I didn't wonder much about the afterwards of Josey pulling the plug, but this makes so much sense for her. In fact, everything leading up to this tells me this is fitting, and probably for the best for Josey. It feels like she's had years to greive this loss in a sense, so it really is time for her to move on. Despite that though, I really like this little bit here-I don’t have a funeral for her.
-because Josey is clearly jaded as hell, but can still accept and appreciate kindness when it comes to her. It's a little touch, but it's so easy for characters like this to be all edges, and this little moment of appreciation goes a long way.It’s . . . nice. They make it a bigger deal than it needs to be, but at least they’re kind.
The talk between her and Marshel was really good. The way they played off each other was engaging to read, and I love how Josey took credit for keeping the letters despite originally wanting to get rid of them lmao. It's also both cool and terrifying to see that whatever the hell happened in Virbank has made it so high up the ladder. It's good they're taking it seriously.... but it's scary that this is an event they have to take seriously.
Moving on from that though, I really love how, while the passing is a bit somber, the mood quickly picks up as Josey starts to actually look to the future. We've only spent 4 chapters with this character but it feels so good to see her looking forward to the future instead of feeling like she's destined to drown with a chain to her foot. The sequence where she talks about her future pay raise, the move, the debt going down, and getting a new bed had me so excited for her. And the final line of the chapter-
just makes me so excited for her to get to the next chapter of her life.But I don’t. My eyes are focused forward. I pack. I get my tickets in order. I send my things ahead and come Monday, I meet Marshal by the pier—no pirates around—and I’m off on a ferry to Castelia. And in the end?
I don’t look back.
So can I just say? I love Magnets. I love that he stowed away to follow Josey, I love his flippant attitude, and I love everything about this exchange
In theory I wanted Josey to have a smooth transition to her new city, but this is the freakin best lmao. Besides, the cottonee has the distinct honor of causing the most trouble That was a super clever way to incorporate that pokemon too! Shout out to candy being a good little Cottonee untilMagnets doesn’t care. Zips of electricity zap from the ends of his magnets with unconcealed glee, and I drop my face into my hands.
Whozawhatcha got you killed. At least you got to spread chaos for Josey in the story; the way we should all strive to be remembered honestly.
Ingo was really interesting to see. I feel like I don't ever see much done with the train pair, so it was cool to see him, and see how you characterized him. I liked that he was willing to help out, but not in a way that screwed him over, and he's not afraid to note that he could have left Josey high and dry when she gets huffy about it. A nice dude, but one that doesn't seem ready or willing to put up with any bullshit. I feel like the two could get along if they got the chance. I do hope we'll see him again!
The ending of this chapter once again gets me so excited for this change. As Josey is going over everything new in her life, ending off with
I just can't wait to see how it goes! Clearly there will still be things to deal with, but damn if it isn't nice to have some hope while dealing with those things!I’m here.
I’m making it.
And for once, there’s no one to drag me down.
-Side note, I couldn't find a good place to put this in the comment proper but this little sequence
had me giggling like a madwoman. It's so petty, and Josey ultimately still got the short end of the stick, but this is still freaking great.I flash the receipt to the cinder dick that wasn’t going to let me on board in the first place. The conductor grimaces, and I smugly brush by.
I'm reading at a snail's pace, but I look forward to reading more!